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    Unfinished Puzzle

    Unfinished Puzzle

    Alone in the dark alley
    Mind's being distracted and confused
    Betrayal you inflicted to my soul
    Produced a deep wound that will never heal.

    I thought I knew you
    We've been together for a long time
    I thought you were sincere
    For having me as your friend, as you said.

    Are you happy now?
    My eyes are red and swollen
    Are you satisfied?
    I am broke and hopeless!

    A long time ago we promised,
    Under the tall old oak tree,
    Forever we'll stay side by side
    Nothing will make us apart

    But the unexpected dreadful day came,
    When you suddenly stabbed me at my back,
    You were laughing maniacly
    I fell flat on the floor.

    Our puzzle is now over,
    Former friend of mine
    It will never be completed
    And it is impossible to start over again.


    notes: this poem i made... is a product of a hurtful experience, recently. Making this poem really made me feel a little better. Thanks for reading.

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    Re: Unfinished Puzzle

    Awesome job raja!!! This poem puts a broken friendship into perspective! I like the wording in this poem and the image it puts in my mind! Way to go raja!

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    Thanks for your wonderful comment Blue fox ^_^. It just hurts when you remember painful things in the past.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Unfinished Puzzle

    yeah I know that feeling all to well! I wrote a poem last night for Shini and Cherryblossom18 since we've experienced the same thing. By that I mean a dear family member. Either way you did and awesome job!

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    Re: Unfinished Puzzle

    man thats really cool in a dark twisted way man someone must have realy backstabbed you

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    @ vulcan; yes this poem seemed to be dark and all... it is based on experience...

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Unfinished Puzzle

    waw raja_psyche i never knew u can write poems..
    nice poem... ^^ so dark and intriguing (am i spelling it right?) lol
    sheesh...backstabbed? hmm..i never get backstabbed yet...
    maybe someday -.-

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    Re: Unfinished Puzzle

    i liked it very abstract. It sounds like something that was written by only someone who had first hand experience.
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