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Feb 16, 2007, 05:26 AM
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 | Unfinished Puzzle Unfinished Puzzle Alone in the dark alley Mind's being distracted and confused Betrayal you inflicted to my soul Produced a deep wound that will never heal. I thought I knew you We've been together for a long time I thought you were sincere For having me as your friend, as you said. Are you happy now? My eyes are red and swollen Are you satisfied? I am broke and hopeless! A long time ago we promised, Under the tall old oak tree, Forever we'll stay side by side Nothing will make us apart But the unexpected dreadful day came, When you suddenly stabbed me at my back, You were laughing maniacly I fell flat on the floor. Our puzzle is now over, Former friend of mine It will never be completed And it is impossible to start over again. notes: this poem i made... is a product of a hurtful experience, recently. Making this poem really made me feel a little better. Thanks for reading.
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Feb 16, 2007, 05:38 AM
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| Re: Unfinished Puzzle Awesome job raja!!! This poem puts a broken friendship into perspective! I like the wording in this poem and the image it puts in my mind! Way to go raja! 
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Feb 16, 2007, 05:42 AM
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| Re: Unfinished Puzzle Thanks for your wonderful comment Blue fox ^_^. It just hurts when you remember painful things in the past.
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Feb 16, 2007, 05:44 AM
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| Re: Unfinished Puzzle yeah I know that feeling all to well! I wrote a poem last night for Shini and Cherryblossom18 since we've experienced the same thing. By that I mean a dear family member. Either way you did and awesome job!
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Feb 21, 2007, 04:19 AM
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| Re: Unfinished Puzzle @ vulcan; yes this poem seemed to be dark and all... it is based on experience...
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Feb 21, 2007, 05:14 AM
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| Re: Unfinished Puzzle waw raja_psyche i never knew u can write poems..  nice poem... ^^ so dark and intriguing (am i spelling it right?) lol sheesh...backstabbed? hmm..i never get backstabbed yet... maybe someday -.- |
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