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    Unforgiven

    The wise ones are searching
    For the hope that we've lost.

    Out there it's shinning
    An image of trust.
    The weak ones lost faith
    In this unforgiving world.
    They're caught in the hate
    And deceitful words.

    The love is a debt
    The belief is still there.

    That's all that is left
    And few can still care.
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    Re: Unforgiven

    The ending is cute. But I believe the stanzas in the middle should ber merged to make a four verse stanza. And then a few words seem iffy.
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