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    The unforseen obviousness

    I keep wonder what the hell went wrong,
    but I should have seen this coming all along.
    I keep wondering why you did all this...
    and i know it's for more than a simple kiss.

    You left a life of luxery and safety,
    for a guy you knew back when and maybe....
    maybe you didn't know it then,
    but your losing your life all over again.

    He's dark clothed by evil,
    and not your type of guy for real.
    I hope that you see the light,
    and figure out what really is his deal.

    You gave your life away for nothing and why.
    I'm not sure exactly what is on your mind.
    All i know is that this must be fixed quick,
    or I'll see you suffer and your life will be it.

    A bitch you were and now become again,
    and i've never seen this stupidity since when...
    I was all alone in OKC.
    Just don't be as stupid as once was me.

    I'll never forgive you for doing what you did to our mom and dad,
    and i hate the fact that your all dumb and mad.
    Just don't take it out on us anymore,
    cause your being a stupid little whore.

    I never thought i'd call my sister these words ever,
    but it's clear as crystal waters that you'll never,
    ever be the kind of kind person i try to be.
    Now I know what may be your destiny.

    I pray that i'm wrong about you,
    and that you'll eventually come through.
    But if you don't I'll eventually miss you....
    once was my sister is now torn in two...


    By Justin McComrick (White Rose)

    "I tried... that's all that could be asked of anyone."

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Re: The unforseen obviousness

    I never thought i'd call my sister these words ever,
    but it's clear as crystal waters that you'll never,
    ever be the kind of kind person i try to be.
    Now I know what may be your destiny.

    i love this part of the poem showing your
    concern while atthe same time being pissed
    about it knowing you cant stop her. alot of familys
    go through this today and its sad its like fmaily
    disfunction in the norm for every family these days.
    awesome poem though and i cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The unforseen obviousness

    Wow. This was definitely full of emotion, and it was obvious who your tone was directed at and what your tone was. You show concern for her and not just pure anger, which is good, and your rhyming was nice. Sorry you're having problems with your sis, honey, but, emotions are what drives your writing, so it was a great poem.
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    Re: The unforseen obviousness

    *cheering*
    I love it
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    A 10!
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