Like to whom you wrote that... You must be real angry at him/her.
I think I've known someone like this... a girl... a very nasty person... he liked to get people down on their knees... she liked to destroy people peace by peace, bit by bit, just as you said... She usuay smiled at you and said something really, really disgusting... and you couldn't do anything about it, somehow she had power ower everyone, noone really liked her but noone could say anything to her... maybe becouse you'd be beaten afterwards.
Nice poem, made me remember this girl, you shure know how to paint a person, a scene right in front of me... Really like it...
Apr 18, 2007 11:54 AM #10
hummm yeah its really messed up how people abuse others
sounds like you had a horrible experience with that person
well glad its over for you
thanks for the comment Lasura
Apr 23, 2007 03:14 AM #11
<Woot> Kimi! Awesome poem you've captured something that goes on everyday around us! Fake people and liars! I especially like the part about them smiling so sweetly as they stroke their own ego! Keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to writing with you as soon as this writers block I have is broken! Looking forward for you next poem!
Apr 23, 2007 05:56 AM #12
I enjoyed this poem a lot. Many story poems I have read recently haven't flowed so well, but this one did pretty well. It kept my attention and made me want to finish it. I look forward to reading more... Keep up the good work! ^_^
Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.
Apr 23, 2007 03:46 PM #13
Originally Posted by Darkened_Star
Originally Posted by BlueFox1
thanks you guys!!! glad you liked it
I really liked the idea of someone who could look so nice but underneath it all be a monster