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Old Apr 30, 2008, 08:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Unrequited (unrequittal revised)

as I'd mentioned before I've found a cache of poems that I wrote when I was a younger me... (not that I'm old) but I was a lot more opinionated and selfcentered back then and more in touch with my intimate feelings as they got crushed time and time again by this one girl whom I adored.

Well I looked at this poem bitter unrequittal and it just didn't sit right with me so I'm re-posting a revised copy of the poem without all of the flashy colors and some changes that make it more to me. (I hope this doesn't get me killed or worse... banned.)

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Unrequited.

Why can't I be good enough for you?
The simple truth, deafening it haunts.
I love you more then a man can do

without losing to a law more true.
Thus forming me, a figment of fear.
Why can't I be good enough for you?

To give up, is that what I should do,
To prove what only a heart can hear?
"I love you more then a man can do."

Pleading pain, my heart pulses blue,
"Right here I stand... I'M STANDING RIGHT HERE!"
Why can't I be good enough for you?

A simple truth and a pain more true...
Love is lost when lived too full. Now that's clear,
I love you more then a man can do.

Scorching, screaming, cries some sacred clue
inside it screams, "it's all right here!"
Why can't I be good enough for you?
I love you more then a man can do.
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Old May 02, 2008, 05:21 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Unrequited (unrequittal revised)

i like this line, it gives you a haunted kind or feeling that makes you want to scream and very sweet coming from a guy.

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Why can't I be good enough for you?
The simple truth, deafening it haunts.
I love you more then a man can do
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