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    Bitter Unrequittal

    Why can't I be good enough for you?
    The simple truth haunts me loud and clear.
    I love you more than a man can do

    without losing to a law more true.
    To make myself a portrait of fear.
    Why can't I be good enough for you?

    To give up, is that what I should do
    To prove what only the heart can hear?
    "I love you more then a man can do."

    Pleading pain whilst my heart turns blue
    "Right here I stand... I'm standing right here!"
    Why can't I be good enough for you?

    A simple truth and a pain more true
    I pushed you off the pier. Now it's clear
    I've loved you more then a man should do.

    Scorching, burning now a raging flue
    inside it screams, it's all right here!
    Why can't I be good enough for you;
    ...I love you more then a man can do.

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    Re: Unrequittal

    Wow this is a really good poem ^^, I love how you took the colors to your favor and made it part of the poem. I love the poem, it reminds me of a poem I wrote before. It reminded me of what my friend and I talked about before, love.
    Last edited by gren; Apr 19, 2008 at 08:51 PM. Reason: removed quoted poem
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    Re: Unrequittal

    Thankyou, read the title... that's what it really is ^^ it's from a situation with one of my friends a while back... but yeah I hope that people don't take this the wrong way. I put it here because it's something that I thought people would appreciate. Not because it's reflecting how I currently feel. I actually feel the opposite right now.

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    Re: Unrequittal

    Sounds like a person absorbed deep into his thoughts, and are the different thoughts and feelings represented by different colours?
    Interesting poem.

    And what does "Unrequittal" stand for?

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    Re: Unrequittal

    It's a word that I made up... it's hard to describe what it means intelligently because it's more of a feeling then a thought. It's the word to describe the state of being unrequited. I liked the sound of it because it has a generally soft sound with a harh sound in the middle similar to that lulling feeling of being in love with those little twings of truth the - "maybe _____ doesn't like me" whish is then excused by the soft feeling of the state your in... until it comes to a sliding halt.

    That's it, proof that when I'm depressed I think about pointless things too much !
    I don't really like the color now that it's there but it's too late to change it now... oh well the reason why I did it at6 the time was to emphasize things that didn't need to be.

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