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    The Unseen (Poem)

    I haven't posted a poem on Ao for a while. Here's one of my newest ones. Tell me what you think.

    Appearances can be deceiving
    Smiles aren’t always happiness
    Can you see past a person’s mask
    Touch the soul hidden deep inside

    Do you really know anyone?
    Close your eyes hear their heart
    Gaze within a teardrop
    Unseen by a blinded world
    Kept secret by a Spirit
    Who only wants to cry out

    Human eyes can show so much more
    If you take the time
    Look behind the lies
    Use your heart and mind
    Learn to trust yourself
    And you won’t be without sight

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    Re: The Unseen (Poem)

    Woah!! I like this poem and it dosn't rhyme!! Very rare XD

    Appearances can be deceiving
    Smiles aren’t always happiness
    I like that bit...I can relate...

    Very cool poem!! Please write more ^^

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: The Unseen (Poem)

    it's abt masks n ppl unwilling to open their eyes.......sounds like me wen i was in foolish love.....i like it...flows quite well,,,keep it up

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: The Unseen (Poem)

    Indeed a new poet has emerged.
    Good poem.

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    whoa...this poem is awesome...it has a lot of deep meaning

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    Re: The Unseen (Poem)

    i love it mage.
    i like the third stanza a lot! it's so true...
    good jod! keep it up!!
    sig made for the SOTW comp. week of march 31.

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    Awesome! It has a lot of meaning. Keep up the work.

    +=My Space=+ Thanks zeroenix for the sig and avi... wait that's me. +=zeroenix.net=+

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    Re: The Unseen (Poem)

    Thanks everyone for all of the comments on my poem. I really appreciate it.

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