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Reply With QuoteClorox (Aug 19, 2008), Peach_follows (Aug 06, 2008)
If she could read my mind
She will see she is the main character
Knowing my true feelings, that I
want to pair up with her
Eyes gazing at all this love, but
can't see past the darkness that hides
behind my heart
Still can see the stitches, staples,
tape, & glue from when it
was torn apart
Will she be able to understand
why I haven't confessed my
love from the start
Must I guide her to the black abyss
Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
where all my forevers ended with
a goodbye kiss
Can she travel with all of my baggage
or will she leave it in the lost & found
for someone else to have it
I can't blame her if she does
All is fair in life when it comes
to war & love
Right now I am fighting a battle
& my punches & kicks
are not enough
Who says all you need is love;
tell my heart that; even it knows
it isn't much
Can't feed you when you're hungry
Can't pay bills when you owe thee
Can't comfort you when you're truly lonely,
but it is too much when the love
is honestly phony
Can she see my heart's grave & its skeletons
Look where it came from & where it has been
Born in the harsh reality of the cold cold world
& settled down in the fantasy of hell's den
Can she cope with it; does she comprehend
Can she see that my heart is shadowed
by the shade & won't let light nor love in
The heart can't lie... Truth is... I love you!!!
Clorox (Aug 19, 2008), Peach_follows (Aug 06, 2008)
Its probaly a real personal thing with me, that this poem spoke to me with such volume that it blew me away. Perhaps these lines are the ones that really hit hard and drew me in. (And it just got better)
"If she could read my mind
She will see she is the main character
Knowing my true feelings, that I
want to pair up with her"
In particular... "main character". I look at life like its a movie or comic book, even a video game sometimes. (see my poem "Audition"). What I wouldn't give to be someones "main character"
The emotions were quite raw, so honest. And the result is both sad and beautiful. But, beyond the sadness, this piece gave me hope that even the most broken heart could feel that passion again. And maybe..... just maybe......
... Not Ever Again...
Who is this poem for/Who are you talking about..? Is it me..? lol Jus' kiddin'; you know I love you like a sis... In other words you are like a brother to me... lol
Bravo* with this writing I can see how much you want to love, but love is what makes you scared to even let someone near your heart... In a sense though you want someone to love & love you, but you are letting them know how "tainted" your heart is therefore that's where all the darkness & blackness comes in at... Well that is what I had got from this poem in general... You know I always look deep into your writings no matter how shallow you may be at times... lol ^_^ Got cha', but I still have love for ya'...
This is my favorite stanza:
"Must I guide her to the black abyss
Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
where all my forevers ended with
a goodbye kiss"
Do you want to know why.?? ; ) lol Just know I think it is talking to me, but you know I love the poem...
I like this part maybe because a part of me still is feeling this way but this is direct in a questioning myself i wonder kind of way. keep it up. hope to read more from you. Though punctuations will help clean up your poem a bit.Will she be able to understand
why I haven't confessed my
love from the start
Must I guide her to the black abyss
Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
where all my forevers ended with
a goodbye kiss
"In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends."
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