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    Unspoken Confession

    If she could read my mind
    She will see she is the main character
    Knowing my true feelings, that I
    want to pair up with her

    Eyes gazing at all this love, but
    can't see past the darkness that hides
    behind my heart

    Still can see the stitches, staples,
    tape, & glue from when it
    was torn apart

    Will she be able to understand
    why I haven't confessed my
    love from the start

    Must I guide her to the black abyss
    Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
    where all my forevers ended with
    a goodbye kiss

    Can she travel with all of my baggage
    or will she leave it in the lost & found
    for someone else to have it

    I can't blame her if she does
    All is fair in life when it comes
    to war & love

    Right now I am fighting a battle
    & my punches & kicks
    are not enough

    Who says all you need is love;
    tell my heart that; even it knows
    it isn't much

    Can't feed you when you're hungry
    Can't pay bills when you owe thee
    Can't comfort you when you're truly lonely,
    but it is too much when the love
    is honestly phony

    Can she see my heart's grave & its skeletons
    Look where it came from & where it has been
    Born in the harsh reality of the cold cold world
    & settled down in the fantasy of hell's den

    Can she cope with it; does she comprehend
    Can she see that my heart is shadowed
    by the shade & won't let light nor love in

    The heart can't lie... Truth is... I love you!!!

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    Re: Unspoken Confession

    Its probaly a real personal thing with me, that this poem spoke to me with such volume that it blew me away. Perhaps these lines are the ones that really hit hard and drew me in. (And it just got better)

    "If she could read my mind
    She will see she is the main character
    Knowing my true feelings, that I
    want to pair up with her"

    In particular... "main character". I look at life like its a movie or comic book, even a video game sometimes. (see my poem "Audition"). What I wouldn't give to be someones "main character"

    The emotions were quite raw, so honest. And the result is both sad and beautiful. But, beyond the sadness, this piece gave me hope that even the most broken heart could feel that passion again. And maybe..... just maybe......
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Unspoken Confession

    Who is this poem for/Who are you talking about..? Is it me..? lol Jus' kiddin'; you know I love you like a sis... In other words you are like a brother to me... lol

    Bravo* with this writing I can see how much you want to love, but love is what makes you scared to even let someone near your heart... In a sense though you want someone to love & love you, but you are letting them know how "tainted" your heart is therefore that's where all the darkness & blackness comes in at... Well that is what I had got from this poem in general... You know I always look deep into your writings no matter how shallow you may be at times... lol ^_^ Got cha', but I still have love for ya'...

    This is my favorite stanza:

    "Must I guide her to the black abyss
    Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
    where all my forevers ended with
    a goodbye kiss"

    Do you want to know why.?? ; ) lol Just know I think it is talking to me, but you know I love the poem...

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    Re: Unspoken Confession

    Will she be able to understand
    why I haven't confessed my
    love from the start

    Must I guide her to the black abyss
    Where my dreams turned into nightmares,
    where all my forevers ended with
    a goodbye kiss
    I like this part maybe because a part of me still is feeling this way but this is direct in a questioning myself i wonder kind of way. keep it up. hope to read more from you. Though punctuations will help clean up your poem a bit.
    "In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends."
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