UnSpoken Words

Shippo101 · Sep 25, 2006, 06:32 AM

Packed deep inside
Unspoken words i do so hide
I never said
You never read
Words burning a hole in my heart
So many words no where to start
What i need
is you to read
from the start
Of my heart

Shippo101:This is in the mind of a shy girl..................dude this is what a shy girl thinks. A shy girl's mind is more beautiful then any other girls body

*Kasai* · Sep 26, 2006, 03:06 AM

I actually like this poem. I'd want some punctuation. This sounds a bit weird to me: What i need
is you to read
from the start

!Shinobi- · Sep 27, 2006, 10:05 AM

i liek this one too give a sence of in been and how it feel to like some one and not be able to express it

Sep 25, 2006, 06:32 AM	#1 (permalink)
Shippo101 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In a banana Posts: 220 Thanks: 11 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 4,261	UnSpoken Words Packed deep inside Unspoken words i do so hide I never said You never read Words burning a hole in my heart So many words no where to start What i need is you to read from the start Of my heart Shippo101:This is in the mind of a shy girl..................dude this is what a shy girl thinks. A shy girl's mind is more beautiful then any other girls body __________________ The heavens laugh at our foolish deed and the greed we exceed
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Sep 26, 2006, 03:06 AM	#2 (permalink)
Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: UnSpoken Words I actually like this poem. I'd want some punctuation. This sounds a bit weird to me: What i need is you to read from the start __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Sep 27, 2006, 10:05 AM	#3 (permalink)
!Shinobi- Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Hell Posts: 50 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: -200	Re: UnSpoken Words i liek this one too give a sence of in been and how it feel to like some one and not be able to express it
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