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    This is a series of three poems. The first two are already found in the thread Let Me See You Smile, but they were meant to be read in order. I'll post the three of them in the correct order. I wrote these three poems as something of a chronicle of my encounters with a girl, my one love and the girl I'm with now.

    On the Edge of Surrender
    Daniel L. Carpenter
    5/19/06

    My only light won't shine for me,
    There's someone else she wishes I'd be.
    But I can't take the thought,
    Of her so damn distraught.

    I've got nothin to gain,
    No reward but pain,
    Everything to lose,
    No options to choose.

    The world's turned against,
    And broken my last defense.
    Nowhere left to run,
    Wish I had a gun.

    I'd give it all away,
    And have nothin' more to say.
    I'd end it in a blink,
    But God made me to think.

    I'm such a damn fool,
    Just shootin' some pool.
    Couldn't give up if I tried,
    Just to prove I survived.

    So life can try,
    But I'll never die.
    Not 'till I say,
    And that's not today.

    I'll get on my feet,
    And find my new beat.
    Find the old me,
    And I find the key.
    _______________________________
    Let Me See You Smile
    Daniel L. Carpenter
    5/20/06

    I just want to hold you,
    nothing but console you.
    I just love you so much,
    I'm high off your touch.

    Now you're like me,
    Lost in misery.
    Your tears spilling down,
    Your lips in a frown.

    If I had the ways,
    I'd hold you here for days.
    Let you cry on my shoulder,
    Let your pain smoulder.

    But you'll keep crying,
    And I'll keep trying.
    You still don't love me,
    But at least now you're happy.

    That's all I need,
    Smile and I'd be freed.
    I can't see you this way,
    But there's nothing I can say.

    The words that come through,
    Just an "I love you."
    You don't want to hear,
    It'd just bring a tear.

    So I swallow my heart,
    Play my own part.
    Let you cry for awhile,
    So I can see you smile.
    _______________________________
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    6/13/06
    Daniel L. Carpenter

    What are you thinking,
    When we're smiling and winking?
    How do you feel,
    When we're talking for real?
    I just want to know,
    'Cause when the truth doesn't show,
    I can't help but think,
    We're standing on the brink,
    Of some kind of fall,
    That'll ruin it all.
    Everything that we made,
    All ourselves that we gave.
    But I know in the end,
    with the strength that we lend,
    Our love will stay true,
    'Cause when I come down to it,
    I truly love you.
    Writing is life again.

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    Re: Untitled

    great, I wasn't expecting them to all be a part of one big poem

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    hehehe you in love right? lol man the peom was great, keep it up.

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    Yeah but me and her only have a few weeks left together until she moves away. We just started going out, but I've been in love with her for two years now, but it's killing us that we've got so little time together.
    Writing is life again.

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    Re: Untitled

    Interesting..... I like it(eventhough it's to long for me).lol
    Carve an amble now,
    Saying that the day's still bright,
    And let's play with time.

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    Re: Untitled

    I completely understand what ure going through...completely.

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