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ConradGuravitch103 · Sep 07, 2006, 01:46 PM

Well hello people whats up any way i am not good at poetry, so this originall was a song, never got pased the second verse here it is...

This is how I really am,
so you can take me or leave me,
loving or hating,
thats not how I wanted it to be,
but the way you ignored me when you said that you'd be my friend
...apparently not that way.

So as I sit here raving and raging,
at all the things I've done wrong,
sitting in regret,
thinking that it's over,
but the flames that were supposed to go out were left smouldering,
and now the flames of of rage have been rekindled,
as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low.

well that was my swing at it. I felt that way earlier, but its gone.

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Sep 07, 2006, 02:29 PM

very cool poem rage is something everyone has but its what you do with it that matter's , the build of the rage like you did here was pretty good alos
you should try and do another sometime

ConradGuravitch103 · Sep 07, 2006, 02:32 PM

....what really? Honestly?

Princess Zelda14 · Sep 07, 2006, 03:12 PM

coolness!!!!! you have got some talent! that was really good!

ConradGuravitch103 · Sep 08, 2006, 05:52 PM

thanks again only when i get worked up, this is my last line before losing all control

Schwarze · Sep 08, 2006, 06:51 PM

Yea it's cool! I've felt the feel of ignorance before and your poem absolutely represent it... So its a song? I'm wondering how the melody he3x

kepp the good work.

nice razgriz emblem there

ConradGuravitch103 · Sep 08, 2006, 07:22 PM

uh ok thanks for the good woords schwarze, only last resorts

Arukih · Sep 08, 2006, 07:33 PM

..."now the flames of of rage have been rekindled,
as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low."

Its really beautiful!! Can i borrow this part?? I real love it

powerxxx · Sep 08, 2006, 08:45 PM

hey
that song of yours is pretty cool
it would have alot of potential , trully man it would be a cool song
you should try doing another one
you have talent
keep it up

ConradGuravitch103 · Sep 08, 2006, 08:46 PM

well thank you to of you who posted in the here, i dont know if i get worked up again an i write stuff down, if it comes down to this, and another is written i will post

BlueFox1 · Sep 08, 2006, 09:43 PM

Good way to release the rage in the second part of this song! I wish I could've saw the first part! Good work!

BlueFox1

Sep 07, 2006, 01:46 PM	#1 (permalink)
ConradGuravitch103 Otaku Join Date: May 2006 Location: Home of the Stragglers Moon Posts: 335 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 3,717	Untitled Well hello people whats up any way i am not good at poetry, so this originall was a song, never got pased the second verse here it is... This is how I really am, so you can take me or leave me, loving or hating, thats not how I wanted it to be, but the way you ignored me when you said that you'd be my friend ...apparently not that way. So as I sit here raving and raging, at all the things I've done wrong, sitting in regret, thinking that it's over, but the flames that were supposed to go out were left smouldering, and now the flames of of rage have been rekindled, as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low. well that was my swing at it. I felt that way earlier, but its gone. __________________ Last edited by ConradGuravitch103; Sep 07, 2006 at 02:25 PM.
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	Re: Untitled very cool poem rage is something everyone has but its what you do with it that matter's , the build of the rage like you did here was pretty good alos you should try and do another sometime __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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ConradGuravitch103 Otaku Join Date: May 2006 Location: Home of the Stragglers Moon Posts: 335 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 3,717	Re: Untitled ....what really? Honestly? __________________
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Princess Zelda14 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: look under a man hole cover!! Posts: 109 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 160	Re: Untitled coolness!!!!! you have got some talent! that was really good! __________________ "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..." thats great!! thank you!!
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ConradGuravitch103 Otaku Join Date: May 2006 Location: Home of the Stragglers Moon Posts: 335 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 3,717	Re: Untitled thanks again only when i get worked up, this is my last line before losing all control __________________
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Schwarze Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Paradise of Piracy Posts: 147 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 559	Re: Untitled Yea it's cool! I've felt the feel of ignorance before and your poem absolutely represent it... So its a song? I'm wondering how the melody he3x kepp the good work. nice razgriz emblem there __________________ Lives link to one another, and the world continues...
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ConradGuravitch103 Otaku Join Date: May 2006 Location: Home of the Stragglers Moon Posts: 335 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 3,717	Re: Untitled uh ok thanks for the good woords schwarze, only last resorts __________________
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Arukih Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Portugal Posts: 387 Thanks: 1 Thanked 10 Times in 10 Posts Credits: 9,055	Re: Untitled ..."now the flames of of rage have been rekindled, as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low." Its really beautiful!! Can i borrow this part?? I real love it __________________
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powerxxx Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere on this planet Posts: 131 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 310	Re: Untitled hey that song of yours is pretty cool it would have alot of potential , trully man it would be a cool song you should try doing another one you have talent keep it up __________________ Power -xxx- aka -M.Ali I Fly Swiftly through the air I Spread My Wings Without A trace
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ConradGuravitch103 Otaku Join Date: May 2006 Location: Home of the Stragglers Moon Posts: 335 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 3,717	Re: Untitled well thank you to of you who posted in the here, i dont know if i get worked up again an i write stuff down, if it comes down to this, and another is written i will post __________________ Last edited by ConradGuravitch103; Sep 08, 2006 at 09:00 PM.
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