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    Well hello people whats up any way i am not good at poetry, so this originall was a song, never got pased the second verse here it is...

    This is how I really am,
    so you can take me or leave me,
    loving or hating,
    thats not how I wanted it to be,
    but the way you ignored me when you said that you'd be my friend
    ...apparently not that way.

    So as I sit here raving and raging,
    at all the things I've done wrong,
    sitting in regret,
    thinking that it's over,
    but the flames that were supposed to go out were left smouldering,
    and now the flames of of rage have been rekindled,
    as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low.

    well that was my swing at it. I felt that way earlier, but its gone.
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    Re: Untitled

    very cool poem rage is something everyone has but its what you do with it that matter's , the build of the rage like you did here was pretty good alos
    you should try and do another sometime
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    ....what really? Honestly?
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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    coolness!!!!! you have got some talent! that was really good!
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    thanks again only when i get worked up, this is my last line before losing all control
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    Yea it's cool! I've felt the feel of ignorance before and your poem absolutely represent it... So its a song? I'm wondering how the melody he3x
    kepp the good work.

    nice razgriz emblem there

    Lives link to one another, and the world continues...

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    uh ok thanks for the good woords schwarze, only last resorts
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    Re: Untitled

    ..."now the flames of of rage have been rekindled,
    as I sit here nerve racked and quiet, keeping the fires low."

    Its really beautiful!! Can i borrow this part?? I real love it

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