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    People’s opinion clash like thunder and lightning
    Striking the ground putting fear into hearts of many
    Words of warmth and kindness thrown like daggers
    Stabbing the hearts of the kind and unadulterated

    Eyes of the innocent become teary and clouded
    Tears that were pure now begin to bleed red
    The unadulterated begin to shed their skins
    Like a serpent beginning anew life before it strikes

    The never ending cycle or heartache and grief
    Resumes once more as does life and death
    Piercing the mind like a needle does the skin
    Reality like a drug it numbs and soon sets in


    I'm having writers block so bare with me on this one. Comments and critiques are welcomed

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    very awesome bro i can relate to like thisin a few ways from being
    hurt so many times myself ,people always changing never saying or doing
    what they promiced . how they think and react it's all to much some times
    where all you can do is just yell. i got that from reading this you did awesome
    on this ,i might not can critiuqe poem like most but i love how you wrote this
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Thanks Bro! It was kind of hard for me to write this one because I'm in a slump right now! But if you understood where I was going with this one then maybe I didn't do so bad! Thanks Bro!

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    no prob and i like this poem alot because i did under stand it to a point
    and your slump will be a hump soon because life will always make sure
    you even out in the end
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Bro you're awesome I just hope that other people could relate to my poem like you were able to!

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