Completely dissapeared without a trace.
Where did you go? I don't see your smiling face.
It's so quiet here.
Are you hiding in the leaves?
Or are you hiding out of fear?
Is the expression on my face.
Because I don't know what is
goin' on in your head these days.
What the hell's goin' on?
Last time I checked, you were
fine and nothing had went wrong.
Yup, it starts to set in.
Is this the "silent treatment",
Or am I just trippin'?
**I'm not too happy with this one. I figured I'd post it to see what everyone else thinks. But I feel there's no closure. Maybe I'll come back and edit it later**
nyah!!! its awesome! i love poetry. i wanna be a poet when i get older ^^ you're great! hehe i wish i could write this well
This made shivers run down my spine... In a good way... the starting is won-der-ful!!!! I enjoyed it so much... won-der-ful!!!! Made my imagination work too...
But the ending spoiled it a lill bit... "What the hell's goin' on?" spoiled the dreamy aura, and the last stranza too was in a different mood... Maybe you should edit it a lill bit because then it would make a perfect poem!!!
But all together it was just fine... I enjoyed reading it and am waiting forward to something more!
Woah nice poem i don't know what to write... Absoultly amazing i mean i wouldnt write but i must tell you i would pay to read that great job i loved it and don't let anyone put you off 5/5 exclent
Practive makes perfect; fall seven times and stand up eight. Try hard enough and you will. ^_^
Originally Posted by NekoGirlMaya
Yeah, towards the end is where I started to drift away from what I was originally writing. A small case of writer's block, if you will.
Originally Posted by Lasura
Thanks! ^_^ I'm glad that all of you liked it so much. I wasn't expecting such great reviews. I appreciate all of your comments!:hattip:
Originally Posted by Mini Dev