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    "Horizon"

    We fear that which we could not see,
    people have hoped because they cannot see death standing behind them.
    If we were rain that joins the sky and earth that otherwise never touch.
    Could i join two hearts as well?
    We all drawn togather like drops of water.
    Like plants we repulse each other like magnets.
    Like the color of our skin.
    I cant protect you without holding a sword,
    I cant hold you while holding a sword.
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    Re: "Untitled"

    Indeed this is a great poem that talks about protecting a dear love one i guess i you can name the poem {Horizon} which i think is really talking the theme about it it sure may be a good title hope you like it.

    Well keep on going with the poems hope you get really accustomed with the title of your poems hope to see more in the future. ^_^

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    Re: "Untitled"

    All my other poems aren't "untitled" though.But thank you,I can see how "Horizon" fits into the picture abit.

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    Re: "Untitled"

    Well It's great poem and like what dark1 say put the name Horizon in it..it will be more great ..BTW i love read it ...hope to see more in very near time ...

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    Well I was not sure enough if {Facial Acceptance} would be a fitting title for it but it would be better if we can share ideas when one us get stuck about putting a perfect theme along with a great emotional part in it if you have any questions regarding this you can PM me about it so yeah.

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    Alright,I will.Xxoxx,Dark,you can look to more poems in the near future.^^

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