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evil_neko_youkai · Sep 13, 2007, 03:08 PM

You say you'll be back for me,
But when will you come?
I count the days and still no word
Waiting for the day we'll be together
Sadly, I wait for the impossible
Being with you is nothing but a dream
If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality

The game you played was a cruel one
I still remember the pain I felt
Crying over you
Now I realize
You weren't worth any of it
My tears, sorrow, or pain

Better now than never to learn
At least I took time to think,
About what I want and need
Now I know
You're neither

i haven't written in a while so it might be terrible
please tell me what you think

*Peach_follows* · Sep 14, 2007, 08:29 AM

I didnt think it was terrible. Infact, I liked the feeling in it, its something so many people go through. I esspecially like where you say "Being with you is nothing but a dream
If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality."

Man... so true.

*atomik_sprout* · Sep 14, 2007, 10:45 AM

WOWZERS! Go-go gadget writing skills! LOL. ^_^

You did good with this one! Why you thought it was terrible is beyond me. I like this poem a lot. I don't think I can find a single thing wrong with this one. You hit a real subject and you hit it HARD! It's sadly what most people need to realize about love and relataionships, but never do until it's too late. Mad props! To this poem, I say, "Kudos!" ^_^

evil_neko_youkai · Sep 19, 2007, 04:09 PM

Thanks everyone I'm glad you both liked it!! I thought it sucked at the moment because I hadnt' written anything in a while at that time.

*divine_punishment* · Sep 19, 2007, 04:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by evil_neko_youkai

You say you'll be back for me,
But when will you come?
I count the days and still no word
Waiting for the day we'll be together
Sadly, I wait for the impossible
Being with you is nothing but a dream
If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality

The game you played was a cruel one
I still remember the pain I felt
Crying over you
Now I realize
You weren't worth any of it
My tears, sorrow, or pain

Better now than never to learn
At least I took time to think,
About what I want and need
Now I know
You're neither

i haven't written in a while so it might be terrible
please tell me what you think

How incredibly tragic, and so true. Guys aren't worth it. Trust me.

Keep up the amazing work.

Sep 13, 2007, 03:08 PM	#1 (permalink)
evil_neko_youkai Newbie Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: somewhere making the lives of others hell Posts: 99 Thanks: 1 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Untitled You say you'll be back for me, But when will you come? I count the days and still no word Waiting for the day we'll be together Sadly, I wait for the impossible Being with you is nothing but a dream If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality The game you played was a cruel one I still remember the pain I felt Crying over you Now I realize You weren't worth any of it My tears, sorrow, or pain Better now than never to learn At least I took time to think, About what I want and need Now I know You're neither i haven't written in a while so it might be terrible please tell me what you think __________________
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Peach_follows Femmebot Rehab Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 1,439 Thanks: 108 Thanked 128 Times in 110 Posts	Re: Untitled I didnt think it was terrible. Infact, I liked the feeling in it, its something so many people go through. I esspecially like where you say "Being with you is nothing but a dream If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality." Man... so true. __________________ ...You look tired...
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Sep 14, 2007, 10:45 AM	#3 (permalink)
atomik_sprout Way past cool! Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Minneapolis, MN Posts: 2,431 Thanks: 146 Thanked 142 Times in 122 Posts	Re: Untitled WOWZERS! Go-go gadget writing skills! LOL. ^_^ You did good with this one! Why you thought it was terrible is beyond me. I like this poem a lot. I don't think I can find a single thing wrong with this one. You hit a real subject and you hit it HARD! It's sadly what most people need to realize about love and relataionships, but never do until it's too late. Mad props! To this poem, I say, "Kudos!" ^_^ __________________
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Sep 19, 2007, 04:09 PM	#4 (permalink)
evil_neko_youkai Newbie Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: somewhere making the lives of others hell Posts: 99 Thanks: 1 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Untitled Thanks everyone I'm glad you both liked it!! I thought it sucked at the moment because I hadnt' written anything in a while at that time. __________________
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