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I didnt think it was terrible. Infact, I liked the feeling in it, its something so many people go through. I esspecially like where you say "Being with you is nothing but a dream
If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality."

Man... so true.

WOWZERS! Go-go gadget writing skills! LOL. ^_^

You did good with this one! Why you thought it was terrible is beyond me. I like this poem a lot. I don't think I can find a single thing wrong with this one. You hit a real subject and you hit it HARD! It's sadly what most people need to realize about love and relataionships, but never do until it's too late. Mad props! To this poem, I say, "Kudos!" ^_^

Thanks everyone I'm glad you both liked it!! I thought it sucked at the moment because I hadnt' written anything in a while at that time.

Originally Posted by evil_neko_youkai

You say you'll be back for me,
But when will you come?
I count the days and still no word
Waiting for the day we'll be together
Sadly, I wait for the impossible
Being with you is nothing but a dream
If only the heartbreak wasn't a reality

The game you played was a cruel one
I still remember the pain I felt
Crying over you
Now I realize
You weren't worth any of it
My tears, sorrow, or pain

Better now than never to learn
At least I took time to think,
About what I want and need
Now I know
You're neither

i haven't written in a while so it might be terrible
please tell me what you think

How incredibly tragic, and so true. Guys aren't worth it. Trust me. Keep up the amazing work.