divine_punishment

Do you know what it’s like to be on the inside looking out?
To see children scraping their knees and bleeding for them?
To see a funeral procession and drown in tears?
You think you do.
You’re just standing in the shade.

Do you know how they say history repeats itself?
Mistakes are made over and over.
No one learns a damn thing?
You think you do.
You’re asleep in class.

Do you know what it’s like to feel every blow?
To bruise at every touch?
To wince at every glance?
You think you do.
I’ve been shielding you.

Keep walking.
I’ll be your shadow.

Keep talking.
I’ll be your audience.

Keep looking.
I’ll be there.

(Real Title: I'll Be There)

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RayMe

wow...this is a nice poem...but it sounds like a stalker *looks around* @.@ *hides* no~!

I like it ^^

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divine_punishment

I can just imagine myself as a stalker . . . that would be quite eventful! I just want the person I wrote this for to realize how special she is to me and remember what we were talking about last night . . .

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Astaroth

Oooh........kind of spooky......but in a good way!!!!!!!
I like it a lot!!!!!!!

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!Jamie5192

It's a wonderful poem and i understand what you mean.

What's up with the stalker crap? i think it's a good poem that means a lot. I like this and keep writing okay? Keep up the great work^-^

Peach_follows

I dont think it seems stalkerish. I found there to be quite a statement in it.

I'm going to sudgest something, but I do so humbly. To me you are a superior writer.

The part where you wrote "I’ve been shielding you." stood out quite a bit to me... It was the first point in the poem where I felt like you were taking the responsibilty for easing this persons hardships.

It made me go back to the last lines of the first two stanzas.
"You’re just standing in the shade." "You’re asleep in class."... I thought about them being written as "You're just standing in my shade" and "You're asleep in my class"

See what I mean?...

Anyway, just a thought... the poem is outstanding either way.

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!Flavio Baby

I like this poem. It sounds like you are saying that you will always be there for someone. Well I kinda got that from the title.

ice viper

I like your poem divine. It seems that you are trying to make someone understand that you care for them sort of. But make sure you don't go to deep in the water to make them understand where you are trying to come from. Good job divine keep up the good work.