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    I am one that never lives aimlessly,
    Though I fight with my heart in my fist
    I never try to love when I am angry.
    Because each memory is painful to reminisce.

    I want you to cry when you eyes are dry,
    Love when your heart is a blaze,
    Fight when your drive says try,
    But realize enough is enough when your knees give away.

    I know giving up is a weakness,
    And admitting defeat hurts,
    But being the bigger person is
    Realizing letting go does work.

    If you loosen your hand and open your eyes
    Its more to this strange world then you realize.
    Shippo is determined to become a lvl higher
    I'm a solider of Pen and Paper!
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    Re: Untitled

    well done bro..

    Good for you..

    actually i'm not good in poems but i liked yours..

    ^ ^

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    Re: Untitled

    I really loved this... Very well written and I love how you thoughtfully it seems to be composed. The first stanza really pulls you in by showing enlightened perspective.

    I never try to love when I am angry.
    Because each memory is painful to reminisce.
    And then the poem seems to really embrace all the reality of love, even the pain in letting it go. But its written in such a matter of fact kind of way... almost like it was an instructional pamphlet ... lol
    ... Not Ever Again...

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