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    Untitled(if you have a titled for this I'd like to hear it)

    Days pass by,
    still don't know why I love her,
    know it's long gone,
    through it all,
    all else wrong.

    The world passing me by,
    self inflicted cuts to show what I went through,
    blood on the blade,
    a pain that can't seem to fade away,
    two years of tears.

    Sharing my fears with you,
    a song to remember a memory,
    please let me be alone,
    alone in this,
    with the walls closing in.

    When a memory stabs me in the back,
    lost control of everything,
    lost it long ago now the world seems more black,
    so long ago,
    still it's with me through the days lingering in my head.

    I want it dead to breath new air,
    new air to live in,
    a new era to be in,
    not the corning walls that make,
    me want to give in.

    Life is full of sin,
    but yet it's natural to be ourselves,
    we got our hard times,
    yet we try to stand tall,
    even though we best it all.
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    Re: Untitled(if you have a titled for this I'd like to hear it)

    very cool poem but maybe you should
    try making paragraphs becuase i dont
    see any stanza's here ,of course i am still
    learnign stuff but atleast thats what i think.

    the poem itself is really awesome
    and i can relate to the pain of love
    its cuts alot people deep and when
    somone new cmes around they try to
    give you something that hurt you
    before .

    and cutting your self to show
    thwm how much they hurt you
    is emo but its also a growing trend
    for teens , this poem pretty much
    shows how real life can affect kids.

    i like that very expressive poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Untitled(if you have a titled for this I'd like to hear it)

    I'm not sure of a title,but it is a great poem. It had alot of different emotions in it which made it that more interesting. Keep up the good work and I look forward to readgin more.
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    Re: Untitled(if you have a titled for this I'd like to hear it)

    awesome poem,I think I have a title for it lets call it "A dark life"?

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