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    untitled (moonlight sonata)

    it certainly has been awhile since anyone has seen one of my poems up...

    such a dark night...
    as if the darkness is calling out to my soul...
    such loneliness...
    such sorrow...
    calling out to me...
    come to me my child...
    return to me...

    such a trajedy...
    on that sorrowful day of turmoil...
    and regret...
    a day that never ends...
    a memory that never fades...
    never ceases to haunt my dreams...
    the darkness crying out in pain...

    a yearning grows deep within...
    one that cannot be ignored...
    a desire...
    a passion...
    it calls out to me...
    deep in my sleep it calls...
    wanting me to return...

    but i can never go back...
    never agian can i ever be that monster...
    the beast...
    that demon...
    my heart is no longer mine...
    i no longer control my destiny...

    my passions call out to you...
    my desires are to be with you...
    such beauty...
    such love...
    the one who saved me from the darkness...
    who saved me from destruction...
    from my own death...

    my yearnings are to be with you...
    to hold you in my arms...
    touch you..
    love you...
    never let you go...
    to hold your hand...
    as we step together through the darkness...

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    This has such a sweet ending, stepping through the darkness together.

    I liked how you captured my attention with the rhyming on this part,

    such a dark night...
    as if the darkness is calling out to my soul...
    such loneliness...
    such sorrow...


    It made me want to read on which is good ^^

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    NICE poem really enjoyed reading it
    my fav part was this
    my passions call out to you...
    my desires are to be with you...
    such beauty...
    such love...
    the one who saved me from the darkness...
    who saved me from destruction...
    from my own death...

    my yearnings are to be with you...
    to hold you in my arms...
    touch you..
    love you...
    never let you go...
    to hold your hand...
    as we step together through the darkness...
    ^^^^^^^^best parts^___^
    (-)4(|< 7(-)3 P14|\|37

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    my yearnings are to be with you...
    to hold you in my arms...
    touch you..
    love you...
    never let you go...
    to hold your hand...
    as we step together through the darkness...
    This was my favourite part. ^^
    Although I've spotted some spelling mistakes...It's good
    The dots doesn't really suit me and I would prefer if the lines could be longer instead of replacing it with dots... still, it's a great poem

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    Im relly digin your work man great job bro

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    ditto.....keep up the great work


    thank u SasuraiHell
    go -=NOOBZ=- clan!

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    ohh a kind of dark poem but nice. Isnt the same tittl of the song of case closed?



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: untitled (moonlight sonata)

    Sweet!! I like it!!! Keep it up!
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