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Old Mar 21, 2007, 02:20 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Useless creation

*Warning - some swear words here*

The same old girl who used to be so…
“Pure, like an angel” I always thought
My love, my hope and my life I pondered
But not the cherub you turned out to be

Deceived by your traits, coating my heart with your lies
I don’t know what you’re expecting of me
By walking in your shoes
I became so numb, a mess

You stench of rotten meat
Your essence acidic enough to burn the hardest of hearts
Your presence ominous enough to bring hellish thunder in my mind
Yet you continued your lame-ass drama

I dislike your personality
I hate the way you lust for power and desire
I really disgust the way you use people heart as football
I detest you truly.

I don’t care how lame and pathetic your past was
I don’t give a damn if you are getting back the people you wrecked
I don’t take a shit for your reaction
Nor do I mind about your sorry ass life

I’ll give you this warning
Hurt my friend like you hurt others
And I’ll make you wish that you were dead
When you had the bloody chance
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 02:22 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Useless creation

Wow. Excellent, loving the flow.. use of vivid imagery. Well done, Rave, well done.
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 03:02 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Gee, thanks Kasai. I got a better response than I thought I'd get ^_^
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 03:08 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I give good comments when they are well deserved. As well as negative.
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 03:12 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Yeah, understood. It's kinda strange you didn't point out my punctuation, I did it in a hurry.
Anyway, thanks still ^_^
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 03:15 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Re: Useless creation

gotta agree with kasai there ^^ vivid...
but not my kind of poem hehe i don't like being like that... sheesh...
bad,...

Err is there any person like that Rave? my my...
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 03:17 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Yes it is based on a person, imaginary or else. Glad you liked it, thank you
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 11:24 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Re: Useless creation

You mean the fact that you didnt use periods? They werent needed to give me an idea of your tone and purpose. xD I only mention stuff like that.. if it would truly help the wreck of a poem I'm reading.
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Old Mar 21, 2007, 06:10 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Re: Useless creation

I agree with the comments of others, so I won't repeat what they already said. I'll just add this - After I read your poem, I reread it again, searching for the reason of your title. I couldn't find it. Perhaps I just missed something...? Anyways, because of that, I think your poem content failed to give justice to the title you gave it, or vice versa. I was able to feel the angst of your words, and your imagery helped a lot to make me understand it, but the title is a mystery for me. Anyways, good job, my only complaint is that title. It was an interesting title, but I just couldn't see its relation to the content of your work.
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Oooh..the poem is quite harsh.The swearing may be offensive,but it serves a good purpose for this poem due to the fact that you are trying to grab our attention.I like that.Other than that,i have nothing else to say.
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Old Mar 22, 2007, 03:52 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Very nie man! hahaha... serious huh?
a good defender for a friend..
I doubt it, your friend must be proud by these poem...
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