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    Vague Memories

    You held my hand in yours
    During those lonely times.
    I looked up and I saw
    Your smiling face.

    My heart embraced a dream
    During those lonely times.
    I looked inside myself…
    There you and I were.

    I woke up from my dream.
    You were nowhere to be seen.
    And now, vague memories of you
    Are all I own.

    I am lost.
    Confused and all alone.
    Where are you?
    The warmth I felt is gone.

    Gone from me,
    My dreams and my hope.
    Lost in despair,
    Vague memories are all I own.
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    I actually wrote this on 2007-06-21, and I didn't write this about myself. I guess I read the Wikipedia articles on psychosis and amnesia and got to daydreaming some time beforehand...

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    Re: Vague Memories

    Oooohhh... That struck a chord. I love those first stanzas, how you repeat that line "During those lonely times.". Empahsizing that lonelyness really makes you feel the sadness and confusion behind this "Vague Memory".

    I would say its powerful... But its not... On the contrary, its more like powerless. Just to have that warm feeling snatched away only to realize it was only a recollection of what was. I know that feeling all to well. Very moving piece of writing you have here. Kudos.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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