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    Vanish

    I know it's not one of my better one's but here it is, my latest poem.

    Vanish

    She acted so distant then
    Didn’t say goodbye before she left
    Now she sits alone in the night
    Wishing on once upon a dream

    What happened to the love
    The dreams she once had
    But now she don’t even remember
    They had loved each other so much

    Held each other in their arms
    Kissed so tenderly at times
    And it all vanished
    Within a moments time

    She cries
    Wondering where it all went wrong
    She was so close
    Yet so far

    The distance between them
    Had separated them for so long
    She was right there and yet she turned away
    Unsure of what she should have done

    Now all she holds is regrets
    In her heart and soul
    She wonders if the pain she feels
    Will ever… vanish like the love she once had
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Re: Vanish

    Quite well done. So easy for me, in oarticular to climb into the shoes of the "She" in this story.

    "She wonders if the pain she feels
    Will ever… vanish like the love she once had."

    Man, those last lines really wraped it up nice. Just made the whole thing shine.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Vanish

    Thank you. It was something that came quickly and i wasn't sure if the ending was all that good to be honest with you. ^^ I guess it was just one of those times where you just go with the flow and hope everyone likes it.
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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