This Veil

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Oct 25, 2007, 04:42 PM
Sazzy

This Veil

My body turns cold,
Covered in Black cloth.
Hiding all the changes,
Keeping people out.

Daring to step outside,
People soon quick to stare.
Watching them as I go,
Through this draped veil.

I want to be left alone,
Kept separate from the world.
Away from annoying questions,
That everyone tends to repeat.

This veil is my safety net,
Shielding me from them.
Their never ending badgering,
Making me remember the past.

Leave me alone!
I don't want them near me.
Leave me in this darkness,
Behind this veil of loneliness.
Oct 25, 2007, 04:52 PM
Adarrah

Re: This Veil

Lol When I started to read your poem, I was thinking of a werewolf *chuckles* Must be my imagination. Cool... I like it -PEACE!-
Oct 25, 2007, 05:44 PM
Tifa Lockhart

Re: This Veil

Lol @ Adarrah.

Good poem. I enjoy reading it. Keep up the awesome work. [:
Oct 25, 2007, 11:30 PM
RayMe

Re: This Veil

veil...you said you want to be alone... yet you use a veil.... well..someone can easily go through it... ^^ it's as if you said you hope someone would eventhough the words said something else...

Nicely done... Unique and creative.. :) keep up the good work ^^
Oct 26, 2007, 09:21 AM
Ichigo_06

Re: This Veil

I agree with ray on this one people easily get through veils you need something like a brick wall or something. Great job though I liked it!
Nov 02, 2007, 03:17 PM
Lasura

Re: This Veil

WoW @.@ This is really, really nice.. It has such great emotion in it! I remembered all the times I felt like that when I read it... and anger really started to burn in me anew... that was great too feel it I must admit...

Nice, nice work Sazzy... I think I have to put another person on the list with those who are a-need-to-read ^^ I've liked all the poems I've read by you... Hope to see more ^^
Nov 02, 2007, 03:41 PM
Astaroth

Re: This Veil

Dang.........I almost feel the emotions coming out of this poem!!!!!!
I know that feeling..........i just wish that i had the talent to put it on paper!!!!!!
Very nice!!!!!!
Nov 03, 2007, 04:57 PM
Sazzy

Re: This Veil

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ichigo_06

I agree with ray on this one people easily get through veils you need something like a brick wall or something. Great job though I liked it!

but thats the idea of the poem. If there is a brick wall, then there is a clear way of letting no one in. I wanted it to be something that someone special can get close enough to lift the veil and really love whats inside. Its more about hiding behind something that can only be removed by someone who truly wants to see the person underneath.