good diction, but too much words and a lot of typographical errors (unless they're intended).Also, it needs improvement on enjambment.
The sweetness of vengence is what
drives the lonely on thinking that quinching
that thirst will be so easy. The pain is so addicting
driving you on never caring who might be hurt.
Vegence is a dish best sevred cold , you die inside
as the vengence becomes pleasure always wanting
to feel the pain from others to make yourself feel
alive.
Does it ever end as another life hurdles towards
the black abyss of tragady , once is never enough
if only the thirst for absolution wasnt so simple. To
be so simple its complicated is what makes getting
even so justified.
Justifacation is what we seek but a bottomless pit
of heart renching tears is all we get feeling the never
ending need to be satisfied always looking for that one
time that will end it ,quinching your thirst for that reckoning
you want.
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everyone goes through a time where they think getting even
is what makes things right and in some cases it does but there
are those who cant get enough and keep doing things that
they think are justified. inthe end its really in how you see
vengence and how far you think you should go without
thinking about those that you hurt out of blind rage not vengence.
comments and suggestions are welcomed
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
good diction, but too much words and a lot of typographical errors (unless they're intended).Also, it needs improvement on enjambment.
HolderOfTheDarkChalice (Oct 03, 2008)
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