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    Voice of a broken Angel

    This was the first poem i ever wrote i just found my copy and i thought to share it with you

    Breaking through the sounds of night,
    a shriek that laid my soul bare.
    A flock of birds all take flight,
    as i viewed what happened there.

    A long and gruesome battle fought,
    Between good and evil, light and dark,
    a rend in earth no steel had wrought
    a scar were once there was no mark

    Two titans laid in bundled heaps
    not a single move made by each
    what i saw my mind still keeps
    though to God remove it i did beseach

    A solitary wing bloodied and torn
    I did spy across the valley floor
    as i reached it i stopped to mourn
    a broken angel at death's door


    The brighter a light shines, the thicker the shadows fall

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    Re: Voice of a broken Angel

    Very nicely done! I love how this was written with that fantasy feeling to it. It tells a long story in a short amount of time. ^_^ At the same time I'm wondering if this was written about someone, or if it was just out of thin air. Either way, it's very very good. Keep it up!

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    Re: Voice of a broken Angel

    it is really neither when i draw something particularly good i kind of write a poem beside it it is an old habit of mine


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    Re: Voice of a broken Angel

    well done i like it, its good i hope u right more, and hope we can be friends

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    Re: Voice of a broken Angel

    Really good for a first-poem-ever-written... My first ones are in the level of kindergarden (and I wrote them when I was about ten already).

    This poem is really interestesting and I love the way it's written... very nice, but... it's a lill confusing, I didn't understand what exactly are you talking about- it wanders between reall and fantasy too much... my tired brain can't follow it. lol

    Still I really enjoyed reading it and I'd be really glad to see more of your works... ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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