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    Waiting on Dad.

    As you can see most of my poems are dedicated to my father and are a tad bit on the emo side. Thank you for ya'lls responses.

    She can't remember his face any more
    Deep inside that's what she's looking for
    She can't recall some of the fun they had
    and all the times she said "I love you dad"
    not even the eyes looking down on her
    When she was brought into this world
    She tries so hard to have one picture
    Just one image of him sitting with her
    She can't bring herself all the way
    Back into those hospital plagued days
    That's the only thing her mind recieves
    The only thing her heart can believe
    That her daddy was dying her whole life
    He never could get up and kiss her night
    He never was able to hold her close to him
    Just try to smile through all the medicane
    That's the only memories she'll ever have
    Just sitting in the hospital waiting on dad

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    that was sad *boo hoo* i liked it though

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    Wow O.o That was really good, I give you a 10 out of 10 I can understand what is happening ^^ good job.


    Thanks lifeforce! (:

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    that was a good poem.. nice job.

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    awesome poem, keep it up.

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    was this the same one with the bad mom and the praying dad?

    'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
    'Cause someday I might call you from my heart

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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    Very cute. I love the rhyme technique in this poem.
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    Re: Waiting on Dad.

    This poem is great! I understand the emotion of this poem! Great Job!!!

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