ryomakurosaki (Dec 21, 2007), tora_tora_yatta (Dec 19, 2007)
Waiting Under The Colorful Lights...
Oh how i've missed you, How I wanted to be held by you
So long I was lost, Lost in the darkness of depression
Waiting for you to find me, Watching the days go by
I'm here waiting for you, Come find me before I fall apart...
"Find me..."
Waiting in the rain, I'm begining to freeze over
Siting here all alone, Watching the lights go flying by
Crying silently to noone, Praying that you would hear me
Come and get me, That's what I end up screaming...
"Come and Get Me!"
Darkness is all i've been able to see, Since the day you left me behind
I'm surround by it, I'm consumed by this
It has ahold of me, It wont release me
I'm scared and lonely, Will you come searching for me?...
"Will you come for me?"
I feel so empty without you, It's as if I would fall apart with one touch
Other's try to heal me, But none of them have that healing touch
Your the only one who could ever save me, Your the one and only
I'll keep running along the dark hallways, Searching for the right door that leads me to you...
"I'll keep searching, hopeing that you'll find me"
Time passes me by, And it begins to snow
Lights are being put up, Joyful singing can be heard outside of the windows
Everyone is smileing and laughing, I am still here waiting
Waiting for your return, Waiting for you to finally find me...
"Waiting in snow, under the colorful lights"
I hang the lights on the tree, Trying to pass by the time
But it seems all I can do is cry, But I continue on
I try to keep the darkness at bay, But i'm begining to crumble
I don't think i'll hold out much longer, When will you come for me?...
"Will we ever be together?"
Oh how i've missed you, How I wanted to be held by you for so long
So long I was lost, Lost in the darkness of depression while it ate at my heart
Waiting for you to find me, Watching the days go by and loseing track of time
I'm here waiting for you, Come find me before I fall apart...and can't be fixed no more...
"Find me...please come and save me"
Waiting in the rain, I'm begining to freeze over and my heart is trying to fall apart
Siting here all alone, Watching the lights go flying by and trying to stop the tears
Crying silently to noone, Praying that you would hear me and come looking for me
Come and get me, That's what I end up screaming...loudly to the heavens...
"Come and Get Me! That's all i've ever wanted!"
I've lost my way completly, How come you never came for me?
Walking through the snow still searching for you, Hopeing to come across you
Though it may be hopeless, The darkness may win once again
I have no power over it no longer, You are the holder of my heart...
"It no longer belongs to me, it belongs to you...So will you come and save me?"
It's been awhile since I wrote anything,it feels good 2 finally have somethin again lol.I wanted 2 write about the sadness of bein lost in the darkness of your own heart,while waiting for the one you love 2 finally find you.Well guys tell me what ya'll all think of it kk.![]()
Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^
ryomakurosaki (Dec 21, 2007), tora_tora_yatta (Dec 19, 2007)
i love the poem ^^ it has a perfect balance despair and love. ahh love the reason why people go crazy. these are my favorite lines from the poem because i know many people have faced the same things when in a relationship. this poem really captures the beauty and pain of a relationship ^^ very nice job^^
keep on writing
but maybe use more colorful words to grab more attentions of the reader ^^ that's all i really found that need to be change but other from that it's very nice poem to read ^^
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Thanks for the wonderful and helpfull comments ryomakurosaki!! *hugs*Your right,I do need 2 improve a bit more.Guess I got rusty after not writtin in so long huh lol.Anyway thanks again.
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That was a beautiful poem Shinigami's_Angel...The poem was truly amazing I love the lines and the feeling that was put into it, I could truly understand your feelings at that moment. Very good work even though it has been a while keep up the good work and can't wait to hear more!![]()
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Thank you sooooooooooooo very much Tora!!! *hugs* I'm glad that you liked it so much.I'm glad with the outcome,I was kinda supirsed since it had been so long lol.I'm also glad that I could get my feelings just right so that the reads can understand as well.So hopefully i'll keep gettin ideas and write somethin again soon.Thanks again!! *hugs*
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I loved your song sis. It kinda puts you in the holiday mood with the hopes of finding love. Keep up the good work.
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Thanks so much I love it!
Thanks Sis *hugs* Glad that you liked it.Yeah I was kinda goin for a holiday theme...well it kinda worked it's way in lol.But i'm happy with the out come,it helped with my stress lol.Thanks again Sis *hugs*
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Overall you're poem has a very nice flow to it and I like it. I honestly don't see anything wrong with this song. I can feel the pain that you went throught of missing someone special while wirting this. For the most part, the song flowed nicely, and you word choice made it even better. I would like to see more from you in the near future! Awesome job Shini!
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