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    Waiting Untill....

    As night time covers the sky so does the love from my heart
    no matter the distance between us mine heart will always have
    thee near me ,as my soul finds solace in the the knowledge
    that my waiting for thee is worth the anguish that my heart suffers
    for the want and need of your love.

    The time is near for my heart to come to it's finale beat as my
    dreams and hops of that first kiss dwindle down to nothingness.
    as i see your face fade in my final moment's in this life ,an angel
    can be heard calling my name as i break my promise and leave
    this world knowing i cant wait for you anymore.

    I then picture you on a cool winters day by the sea shore
    as the mist rises of the ocean as the sun comes up reflecting
    it's beauty on the surface of the crashing Tide's see you walk
    away with him smiling always happy never knowing sadness,
    as you hold his hand and kiss him.

    and as your lips meet once more in that passion which i craved
    from you but never got because of loves cruel fate , i lie hear
    and fade as you live your life with smiles like i wanted , love
    for me is never meant to be ,love flees from me. love avoids me.
    nothing i do will give me the love i seek ,but a promise kept
    me going until.........nothing , i am dead i am sorry the promise
    i made cant be kept .

    Be always happy my love because i held out for you
    never had anyone because i loved you so i hope this
    make you happy knowing i lived and died alone just
    for the chance of you running to me.
    Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Nov 10, 2006 at 07:37 AM.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    Interesting poem. You're improving on your spelling a bit more. So...................I think I know what this is involving. Anyways, you knew what was up and it was just a damn game. Reset..........
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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    I really liked it Chris, I thought it was very sweet though sad and I could picture everything clearly. I thought it was written very nicely, good job.
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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    Bro this poem is cool! Like Sincere said it is very sweet yet sad, but it kept my attention through the whole poem! Keep it Bro! You're spelling is getting better, but you already knew that!

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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    yeah i did lol but i am getting better but i am still wanting to improve so
    i can do something specail for somone with out having mistakes,and i hope i can get as good i want for them, and i like the fact that my improvment
    comes from being here on AO i ahve read alot of poems that really make
    me want to be better like sincere,shady k, and a few other that i love to read . i will keep imrpoving as i keep writing
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    wow man that was pretty awesome. Check the spelling of some words and fix them so the poem can be more kooler than it is now.

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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    i used spell check and it say's there is nothing ewrong with
    it mayby i didnt word something the right way, but thanks for the tip
    i will see where i messed up ketaro
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Waiting Untill....

    Full of emotions compressed in just one poem... Fantastic, never saw like this one before... I liked it very much...

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