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    Waiting for you!

    Time its what makes thing's go so wrong
    or so wonderfully right i just seem to be
    to let time waist away not really thinking
    on how things could be , i sit here as i pop
    the cork on another bottle of jack , he always
    seems to know how i feel when i sit there letting
    my feelings and thoughts drown me.

    I spend hours emptying one shot glass after
    another trying to shoot my lonelyness away
    as i aproach my 5th i stop now as i see a picture
    hanging on the wall and i see my self smiling with
    someone there by my side , i get a lump in my throat as
    i take 3 more shots not caring if i choke or not with
    how quickly i let them slide down my throat.

    I know i have been mistaken and i have got
    some imperfection's things just seem so ****ed
    up with how things have gotten so out of control
    you always said things to keep me waiting for you ,
    i made a commitment to you because i love you , things
    always seem to just slip away when i give my self so many
    reasons to stay.

    You always find away to keep my waiting here for you
    you could stomp my feelings and heart a million times
    and i could break your heart just as many times but things
    just never end up like we want , and you go away once more ,
    how many times must we have this dance before we walk off
    the floor holding hands and become happy.

    this poem is a bit lengthy because i wasnt sure how to
    makes the lines short its like they kept going and the meaning
    behind this poem is pretty simple love for someone can be so great
    they if you try to leave they say something that keeps you there
    wating for them when they leave you. or it could be you saying
    something to keep them waiting for you.

    either way life is just really complicated anyway comments
    and sugestions are welcomed
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Waiting for you!

    indeed,life IS complicated.you could wait your whole life for someone you know will never come back.your poem expresses this very well!what a great poem...
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    Re: Waiting for you!

    "if you try to leave they say something that keeps you there
    wating for them when they leave you. or it could be you saying
    something to keep them waiting for you." So deamn true and this poem shows that verry well...
    I enjoyed reading this poem... though it was a little confusing for me in some places, but it's propably just because of me not knowing English that well...
    I'll be waiting forward to your next works...

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    Re: Waiting for you!

    Awwww....You waited for that person for a very long time and you still did that in the poem thats why i love it so much so I hop to see more!
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    Re: Waiting for you!

    Once again you've written another great poem. This one deals with happiness as well as heartache which is so typical in alot of bad relationships and I've had my share of those. Wonderful job and I already know I'll love your next one as much as I do the others.
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