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    ~The War~

    I loved you.
    From back in the days of the dry erase board.
    The tomagotchi days.
    The boy with the guitar.
    A friend. Someone kinda like me.
    In a world of people so different, the normal ones.
    I loved you.
    In Chris' basement.
    My first kiss.
    My first of many things.
    To me, you were perfection.
    To you... I was just a way to pass the time
    'till something better came along.

    So I hated you.
    Because you remind me.
    That Im not good enough.
    That I was NEVER good enough.
    I've become too fat.
    Too akward.
    Can't "Dance Dance Revolution."
    Too bitchy.
    So I hated you.
    Because my loyalty and undying love,
    do not sustain you.
    Because no amount of poetry or pictures
    can change this.

    The Love and the Hate in me.
    They had a war.
    Neither won.
    They both died.
    So I have niether Love nor Hate.
    Just memories.
    Thats MY scenario.
    Theres nothing funny about it.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: ~The War~

    Nice... Love the ending... strange that you post this poem today... Today I understood I don't have hate in me anymore... a nice feeling...

    I like this poem very much, it's so true- it's so about life...
    And these two different feelings- described and joined together perfectly ^^ The first stranza- full of love, the second- full of hate and a bit of sadness all over it... great mixture!!!

    A wonderful work Peach!!! ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: ~The War~

    i loved it my poems suck so there no chance of me posting one here but i can tell when i see a good poem and this is one

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    Re: ~The War~

    wow such enduring traits its sad
    that some people take fro granted
    what you hold dear , it is sad and in the
    end you feel like it has to be you because
    nothing is going right .

    thats not true at all if anything your
    persistance in unwavering love and affection
    make you the perfect lover or partner since you
    have what most look for .

    life goes on so dont let things go the way of the do do bird
    thats what ii get from this , its a very awesome poem i love
    it.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: ~The War~

    it was okay at best sorry i did not like it but keep writing it well turn better

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    Re: ~The War~

    Quote Originally Posted by The GunGrave of Trigun View Post
    it was okay at best sorry i did not like it but keep writing it well turn better
    Eh.... Cant please everybody... or in my case... It seems like I cant please anybody.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: ~The War~

    very emotiaonal i like the emotions in it keep it up writing more♥ da princess
    Yeah, Bye.

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