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    Watching The World

    As I watch the world
    Somthing caught my eye
    Somthing brighter than a star
    Somthing I could never reach for.

    You were untouchable
    You were a dream
    You felt like a friend
    And in the end
    You were nothing.

    Nothing but a liar
    Nothing but a cheat
    Nothing but somthing
    Somthing but nothing.

    As I watch the world
    I weep and I cry
    For the friend I lost
    As I moved on by.

    I got farther and farther
    in to the black
    I went deeper and deeper
    untill there was nothing but black.

    As I watch the world
    And i see you walk by
    I reach out for a moment
    and you just slip on by.

    I am nothing but somthing
    I am somthing but nothing.

    In the end i was nothing but a friend
    In the end i was Nothing
    Not even a friend.

    As I watch The world
    Somthing caught my eye
    As I watch the world
    You walked on by.

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    Re: Watching The World

    You have a really good talent with poetry. ^^ The ending stanza was very good; it fit well with the entire poem.

    As I watch the world
    I weep and I cry
    For the friend I lost
    As I moved on by.
    I liked that one the best. ^^

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    Re: Watching The World

    WOW... that was pretty damn good i can feel were the poem is comming from you are really good i hope to read more from you keep up the good work and dont stop writting i look forward to your next one

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    Re: Watching The World

    Your poetry sucks and has killed several hundred children merely by existing.

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    Re: Watching The World

    um ok I don't know what is up with that last one (really i just don't care) but thanx. i plan to writ more

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    Re: Watching The World

    That's beautiful, LL. Good work.


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    Re: Watching The World

    Nice poem man, keep writting poems like that.

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    Re: Watching The World

    very impressive!! keep up the good work


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