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    Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Waves crashing upon the shore
    Flowing fast past your feet
    Always leaves you wanting more
    Heart is pounding faster with every beat

    If you see my soul
    Please tell it to come home
    I need it now before I fold
    Need it to stop its constant roams

    Need now to be made of steel
    In order to make it up the hill
    Need courage for my will
    For my heart has love her still

    Waves crashing upon the shore
    Flowing fast past you feet
    Always leaves you wanting more
    Heart is pounding faster with every beat.


    This is an old one that I revised recently. I'm tryin' ta get back inta writin' and drawin'. Have been doin' much of either in the past year. Hope evry1 likes it.

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    Re: Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Sonds good, nice flow/rythm..... I like it it's very good Joe Mage... Keep it up, i hope to see more ^^

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    Re: Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Definately get back into writing... A few small errors, but other than that... This is worthy of publishing.
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    Re: Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Thnx. Glad u like it. I, hopefully, will b doin' more in the up comin' days. We'll c.

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    Re: Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Very nicely done!!!!!
    Keep up the great work!!!!

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    Re: Waves Crashing Upon The Shore (Revised)

    Lol ^^ yup...this is nice...since theres a stanza which is written twice...i suggest u make it longer...and make it like a song..

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