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    the way you lie!

    This is my first time posting a poem >< if need of improvment please let me know thank you.
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    i hate the way you lie
    it hurt me that you lie to me
    you lie to me to many time

    now there is no more us
    there is only me and you
    i hope you are happy now
    that you break my heart with a lie

    you through that i would never find out but i did
    you were wrong to lie to me about everything
    you cheated on me and keep lieing to me about the whole thing

    i hate the way you lie
    you nver need to lie to me
    i told you could tell me everything and
    i would not be mad or hurt
    but you hurts by lieing to me

    i hate that way you lie
    but i stilll love you with my whole heart

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    Re: the way you lie!

    I hate the way you lie....
    it hurt me that you had to lie to me,
    you lie to me to many times....

    now there is no more us
    there is only me and you,
    I hope you are happy now
    that you have broke my heart in two....

    you through that I would never find out but I did,
    you were wrong to lie to me about everything!
    you cheated on me... and keep lieing to me about the whole thing...

    I hate the way you lied
    you never had to lie to me,
    I told you could tell me everything... and I wouldn't get upset...
    but it hurts you felt you had to lie to me..

    I hate that way you lie.. we can never be together...
    but I stilll love you with all my heart...
    But you and I was never meet to be...

    *here are some changes I made that I thought would be better I hoped it helped*

    *~A moment like this we will never be able to go back. Holding you like this wanting the time to stop. Just the two of us we don't need words.~*

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    Re: the way you lie!

    thanks for fixing my first pome jenny............................................. ................

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