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    we

    in our life
    we live

    without knowing
    the true meaning of life

    we laugh
    we cry

    life is two kinds
    sad and happy

    and somtimes
    it's not for us to decide
    what life we want

    sad or happy
    we continue to live
    to move on

    but most of us live
    sad lives
    lives that will never forget
    what happened in the past

    we live
    just wondering how it feels
    to fly up high
    in the sky
    with a smile
    not a tear

    but
    we live with our eyes open
    we know how to feel
    and we realize things
    not known to the world

    we are one of a kind
    we are the people
    who know how to live
    and how to see
    but mostly feel free
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    Re: we

    O_O wow my friend.....i don't know why but it makes me want to cry in a way i can't really explain kind of like happy and sad.....like u said in the poem.....but it good and keep it up.
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    I will fight until i find what i'm looking for...you can not judge me on my apperence I am a Warrior. If you have a problem with me..... then my blades will meet your neck.

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    Re: we

    Very good. ^^ Quite true too *nods*

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    Re: we

    awesome kool poem man, i really like the emotions that you put in your poem.

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    Re: we

    The last stanza was the best. I guess I'm not gonna see any punctuation and capitlization from you. In fact, some poems never need them. But I felt as if nothing was emphasized in the poem. It held emotion, but not enough. I felt that if you singled out some words by either capitilizing or breaking, it would have been much better. Nevertheless, you do have a talent for writing.
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