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    Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    I am a tired, tired man.
    Everybody knows it.
    When I walk in the door,
    my weary eyes show it.

    I'm so sleep deprived.
    I barely go to bed on time.
    Yet, when I crash at 2am,
    I'm up at six-thirty-nine!

    It's a zombie!
    Oh, wait! That's just me.
    In the mirror, I look like
    something out of Silient Hill 3.

    Me? An insomniac?
    Sometimes, I never rest.
    Up in bed for hours due to
    my never-ending stress.

    So sleepy, I am.
    Now, I'm talking like yoda.
    Scoot over a lil' bit so I
    can crash on your sofa.

    I am a tired, tired man.
    Everybody knows it.
    When I walk in the door,
    my weary eyes show it.

    I need Lunesta or something...


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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    I know entierly how this feels. I like the last line being entierly different feeling then the rest of the poem. I can see your tired self stumbling zombie like in the door. Glad that's not how you came home today. <3

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    Well at least I see a bit of funny Sprout in there... Your humour is what makes this poem really, really cool and enjoyable to read. I really have missed this Sprout!!! ^^

    The flow of this one maybe didn't feel that well though... but it was ok ^^ I enjoyed readin it and I hope to see more of funny Sprout please ^^

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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Well at least I see a bit of funny Sprout in there... Your humour is what makes this poem really, really cool and enjoyable to read. I really have missed this Sprout!!! ^^

    The flow of this one maybe didn't feel that well though... but it was ok ^^ I enjoyed readin it and I hope to see more of funny Sprout please ^^
    Thanks! I'm glad you like it! I'm tryin' to add that "Sprout" humor to my work again. It's just hard to break out of such a negative writing loop, y'know? I wrote a new one recently that is kinda humorous.

    This one I had to think real hard about what I was goin' for. I really couldn't decide if I was goin' for slightly humorous or just jump in to complain mode, LOL. Once again, thank you for your comment and your time! ^_^


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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Thanks! I'm glad you like it! I'm tryin' to add that "Sprout" humor to my work again. It's just hard to break out of such a negative writing loop, y'know? I wrote a new one recently that is kinda humorous.

    This one I had to think real hard about what I was goin' for. I really couldn't decide if I was goin' for slightly humorous or just jump in to complain mode, LOL. Once again, thank you for your comment and your time! ^_^
    Dude to add a bit of your Humor sprout in your work wouldn't it be easier if you were in that mood? either way it is showing again, good work hum don't know what advice I could give ya, but hum, laugh a bit more man it is good for your health, best medicine around and its free, anyways on the note of the poem, you did well on this one, I like it, made me laugh that is a good thing. keep it up man.
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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichigo_06 View Post
    Dude to add a bit of your Humor sprout in your work wouldn't it be easier if you were in that mood? either way it is showing again, good work hum don't know what advice I could give ya, but hum, laugh a bit more man it is good for your health, best medicine around and its free, anyways on the note of the poem, you did well on this one, I like it, made me laugh that is a good thing. keep it up man.
    Yeah, it would help if I were in that mood, but that's not often the case these days. I still try to look on the brighter side of things though, because I really feel like I need to break away from all the negative chi that's been floating around lately.

    I'm glad you liked this one though. It's good to see that my even experiments are liked by you all. ^_^


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    Re: Weary Eyes (Ode to the Living Dead)

    Lol...I love it.
    It's brilliantly funny....pretty much because everyone knows zombies are awesome.
    If this had a rating scale...I'd ten it.
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