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    What I feel

    You are the emotionless eye.
    Everything you do is involentary...
    and you just stopped caring about everything along time ago.
    You most likely cut...just to remind yourself that you are infact,
    still alive and full of this dreadful blood that runs through your veins.
    You are more than welcome to message me if you ever want to talk.
    I know exactly what it is like being in your shoes.
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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    Another personal journal entry. Nice one there, forgotten. Kudos. I liked how you stated that you know what it is like filling the other's shoes. Well said. Nice work, once again.

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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    It doesn't matterif the quality of your poems suck..what matters is you and how you choose to express yourself.That's all that matters.Good job.

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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    I'm gonna agree with White Wolf, the last line was nicely written.
    You most likely cut...just to remind yourself that you are infact, still alive and full of this dreadful blood that runs through your veins.
    I think it'll be better if it was shorten cuz it doesnt match the whole piece Nice job tho.

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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    A few spelling errors, but overall a nice piece. Well done.
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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    ok, Kasai,
    please tell me where they are and I'll change it ^_^

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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    yup yup.. nice peice right there ^^ good job.. the spelling error...

    I know exaclty what it is like being in your shoes.
    change exactly...

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    Re: what I feel(don't have a title)(sorry if it sucks)

    Thank you RayMe for pointing that out.
    and well thank you all for helping me and commenting^_^

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