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    What I keep on enduring.

    After all this,
    I have found out that you are no longer caring
    You fell for lust, and quite explainable feelings with a guy,
    Whom you have known very less from me
    You have feelings for him
    Nothing unusual
    I've been hurt before
    However, you forget that the love you are seeking is materialistic
    You're probably sad by now,
    Thinking ... that I'm forcing you
    However, all I'm trying to do is to save [y]our sanity ... and our love
    You have feelings for him because we all tend to go to someone outside our relationship,

    And feel good, because someone else wants us
    Is excruciating, deprivation, devastating
    It truly is a pain you cannot explain
    I'm torn, from the inside
    Torn, from the trust we worked so hard to gain
    Forsaken, by your actions ...
    And all I want is for you, My Love, to stay with me
    He has not seen what we've gone through
    He has not experienced the true burden, or should I say, the divine essence of Love.

    He only wants you, he is hypnotising you, and trust me, will end up using you ...
    I know you still love me, and I got angry because I have been hurt because of your senselessness

    But, I forgive you, because I seriously do love you!

    I wont complicate my poem, use fancy words,

    Because this is how I really, trully feel.



    I love you.









    What I fell like -_-
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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    dont put yourself down and also uve done a good job^^ the way it is said its AWSUM

    \m/>.<\m/ keep it up its awsum and the way i can relate 2 that caz there are a lot of problems just keep on i wont 2 see more of your work =^.^=
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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    Thanks, I'm glad you liked them and quite honestly, I was scared because I thought no one would like it, because it is written very amature-ish.

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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    After all this,
    I have found out that you are no longer caring
    You fell for lust, and quite explainable feelings with a guy,
    Whom you have known very less from me
    You have feelings for him
    Nothing unusual
    I've been hurt before
    However, you forget that the love you are seeking is materialistic
    You're probably sad by now,
    Thinking ... that I'm forcing you
    However, all I'm trying to do is to save [y]our sanity ... and our love
    You have feelings for him because we all tend to go to someone outside our relationship,

    And feel good, because someone else wants us
    Is excruciating, deprivation, devastating
    It truly is a pain you cannot explain
    I'm torn, from the inside
    Torn, from the trust we worked so hard to gain
    Forsaken, by your actions ...
    And all I want is for you, My Love, to stay with me
    He has not seen what we've gone through
    He has not experienced the true burden, or should I say, the divine essence of Love.

    He only wants you, he is hypnotising you, and trust me, will end up using you ...
    I know you still love me, and I got angry because I have been hurt because of your senselessness

    But, I forgive you, because I seriously do love you!

    I wont complicate my poem, use fancy words,

    Because this is how I really, trully feel.



    I love you.









    What I fell like -_-
    Comments and mostly critics are welcome.
    That's right Don't feel down and what do you do in this Poem it was a great Job ..and It's ture feeling so you can't hid it and this poem show that & when you say I love you she will know that ..well done ..^^

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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    amazin job^^ i know ur feeling for her will find her and you two will be happy^^. again good job and the poem is simply amazing
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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    agreed with the all 4 on the above and i agree with this...

    "I wont complicate my poem, use fancy words,"

    yup...true feelings dont need to be conveyed with such... ^^ even an action or small things can say much bigger things Nice poem ^^ keep up the good work

    what am i blabbering? @.@

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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    The love others seek
    The love others share
    The love others receive
    Never compares
    To the love
    That I have for you....

    I love you....


    A poem that I just created when I read yours.. Its short and sweet, not normally me... I hope you like it... Enjoy everyone.. ^-^ Love his more though.. it's a LOT better. ^-^ They always are.. my poems suck.. ><

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    Re: What I keep on enduring.

    OH MY GOD! GET OUT OF MY HEAD!! LOL!! ^_^

    You just wrote exactly--for the most part--what I've been dealing with for the longest time now!! You just struck a chord with me! Not in a bad way! It just feels good to know that someone out there understands what I have to go through.

    This poem rocked my face!! It actually made me smile to know that someone thinks the same way--or rather--that someone else is in the same boat as me. If ya ever wanna chat, feel free to PM me! Damn, now I'm rambling! Mad props on this! ^_^


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