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    what is pain

    What is this pain?
    Ive never felt it before.
    Im not bleeding.
    This pain hurt.
    Tears run down my face.
    I dont understand why?
    You promised there wouldnt be pain.
    My heart it hurts why?
    The moment you said I dont love you.
    Is the only thing that can explain this pain.
    Will I leave I dont think I will.
    Because the knife in my hand.
    Say's I wont.
    My blood is now on the floor.
    Along with my heart.
    by leftinthedark aka nicole!

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    Re: what is pain

    Nice poem, I can truly understand how you are feeling in that poem for I am kind of going through the same thing...well good job and can't wait to hear more

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    Re: what is pain

    Nice work can't say much but great delivery.

    Hope to read more.
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    Re: what is pain

    ur poem was exciting to read! good job keep up the good work
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    Re: what is pain

    thanks to all about my poem im working on more sorry about the spelling

    sasuke is mine.

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    Re: what is pain

    Shouldn't leave those hearts on the floor they might get dirty. Then what will you clean it with? Windex is not effective.

    I really really like your writing. I read one of your other poems and they both are so full of feeling and it's clear like glass. I hope the heart break eases soon. Good luck. But keep writing. Definately.

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    I like your poem on heart breaks. I can tell you that there is a lot of meaning to this. I agree with bratling definatley keep writing the pain will go away. Hope to read more from you soon.

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    Re: what is pain

    Verry good job Nicole. you put alot of meaning into your poems. I agree with Ice and bratling. you will get better after you write some more it is all a matter of time and that is what we (your friends) are here for.
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