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    What should we do?

    What should we do?

    Waters of time
    Flow through my mind
    Of the days spent with you
    I just can't seem to think it's true

    Do you really love me
    Or is this love fake
    Are you trying to hurt me
    Or are you trying to save me

    You know about my past
    About the things i've said and done
    About the way my past haunts me
    And about how I wish I could fly away

    You say don't go
    Don't leave me here
    But all the pain and suffering I've received
    Doesn't matter to you

    The pain comes from knowing
    That i'm hurting you
    The suffering comes from the fact
    That you know I don't trust you

    Why can't I trust you
    Like i did before
    Why can we just be happy
    At least once more

    Should we lie to ourselves
    Say we hate each other
    Or should we stick together
    And say how much we love the other

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    Re: What should we do?

    @.@ whoa... nice... i love the way the poem starts... its catchy and it made the reader stick to the poem...and the flow to this poem is good too ^^ and the ending is very good too ... nicely done...

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    Re: What should we do?

    I agree with Ray on that GREAT JOB angelic I really like it and felt this one too.
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    Re: What should we do?

    Um... Sounds sad to me! But most poems sound sad to me. Well Keep up hte work! I get a feeling there is something missing though.
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: What should we do?

    Yeah... i think i should have added an ending to it or something... thank you for being honest you guys and i'm glad you liked it.

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