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    Wheels of Destiny

    Wheels of Destiny

    Raised through the bad and bitter
    Till every move I made seem to falter
    Baby steps has marked the end of life’s worriless times
    No longer hearing to pure and innocent hymns

    Life’s Amazon had unknowingly formed our character
    To learn that hurt could origin from different matters
    Forced to acknowledge the thorns that grew between the flowers
    And tread the earth’s faulty paths that’s filled with unknown disasters

    Siblings to friendships to true love
    Winding roads that never seems to meet at its curve
    Until the death reaper lurks somewhere near
    A fate which every soul learns to fear

    The wheel of destiny spins and takes its courses
    Dominating our lives with unimaginable forces
    Picking those worthy enough to rise from the others
    The journey alone proves to be the hardest

    Foretold legends about life after death
    Mysteries that no one could possible leave to rest
    Only time will unveil this prophecy
    Shame it is, no one could possibly pass this legacy

    We’re puppets playing on stage
    Not knowing we’re living in a cage
    Succumbed to wander the sands of time
    Darkness is the answer we seek to find…

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    OMG that is awsome ^__^ 10/10 really its awsome love it

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    ^^; Is lovey,but the and was kinda harsh no?

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Juz posting a random poem I made recently, thx ^^
    I'll drop by once in awhile I guess..

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    If you tried to have a rhyme scheme? It didnt go so well in the poem.
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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    If you tried to have a rhyme scheme? It didnt go so well in the poem.
    I think elie26 did have a rhyming scheme with the poem, it was just that it was inconsistent in some parts of the poem, and the inconsistency sort of ruined the flow of rythm of the whole poem.

    Besides that, however, I like your poem. It was the right choice of title in my opinion (which is a significant factor), and your poem was able to to support that title, never faltering from its main theme. I also liked your theme. Your poem, with your choice of words, was well presented, and I enjoyed reading it ^^ Good work!

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Wow, awesome poem, harsh though... wow o_o ^_^

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Very good poem although it was a little dark. I'm sure your next will be good too.
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