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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    It's been a while since i have read one of your poems.It is good to read something that you wrote because of the fact that yours is unusually creative,despite the fact that your rhyming schem is inconsistent.I like the darkness of this poem.Yeah..keep it up.

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Quote Originally Posted by eleonne View Post
    I think elie26 did have a rhyming scheme with the poem, it was just that it was inconsistent in some parts of the poem, and the inconsistency sort of ruined the flow of rythm of the whole poem.

    Besides that, however, I like your poem. It was the right choice of title in my opinion (which is a significant factor), and your poem was able to to support that title, never faltering from its main theme. I also liked your theme. Your poem, with your choice of words, was well presented, and I enjoyed reading it ^^ Good work!
    O.O I didn't notice the inconsistency when I wrote it ^^"
    I'll try to work on it cuz most of my poem don't rhyme, I need a bit more practice ^^ One of my friend thought the 3-5 stanzas sounded a bit repetitive tho. Thx for pointing the error and also the compliment

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    very nice poem ^^, such a harsh truth

    no complains from me

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    poetry does not have to rhyme in order to be a good poem, sadly true poetry is lost when borders and restrictions are in place and only more crap is produced

    I love it, it has a great depth to it


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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Nice one, Elie. Nice use of words. The rhyming didn't really flow with me.. but the poem itself had great value and meaning. Nice work.
    Last edited by The White Wolf; Mar 27, 2007 at 09:39 AM.

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Quote Originally Posted by The White Wolf View Post
    Nice one, Equinn. Nice use of words. The rhyming didn't really flow with me.. but the poem itself had great value and meaning. Nice work.
    O_O equinn..? and uh thx? lol
    I'll try to work on the rhyming >_< I usually dun rhyme them ._.

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Very good. I will need to check more of your poems.
    Perfection is dull

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    Re: Wheels of Destiny

    Quote Originally Posted by elie26 View Post
    O_O equinn..? and uh thx? lol
    I'll try to work on the rhyming >_< I usually dun rhyme them ._.
    It was an honest mistake, elie-chan. My fault. Sorry. And it's nice that you are trying to add variety to your poem.

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