When do I die?

I look out into the wayward sky
And pray to God that I do not die
Walking around, my vision goes black
Before i knew it i was laying on my back
Looking up as the sun blinds my sight
And caresses my skin with warming light
As the wind came gentle, i fell asleep
I felt my arms and legs sink four quarters deep
There on the ground i lay dead
But my world shattered and i woke in bed
I came to realize that it was all a fantasy
And that it was not the end of me
I'll live for today, and live for this
That one day I'll die in eternal bliss

By: Chris N. of the top of my head =D

This poem flows quite smoothly.But if there was one thing i would ask you is to write some more that has more than a stanza(paragraphs)and would touch the reader's heart and then i would say that your poems is supurb.But it isn't too bad.

The lack of punctuation doesnt effect the flow. Cool and nice job.

IN the poem why do u write 'lie on ur back'
is that like the first stage of death?
i did not like the ideas cuz they are not fresh
but the total poem, if revised, could be kool
and maybe throw in some metaphores bout 'perfect death'