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    When I Close My Eyes

    When I Close My Eyes
    Everything Changes

    I'm a breeze
    I'm the atmosphere
    I don't linger anywhere.
    A cloud with wings
    So why can't I shower down rain

    There is no nest for me
    I may stop somewhere
    But I won't remain

    Some breeze has come and taken me away
    The wind has blown me in every direction
    I keep soaring like the birds
    Won't I glide down and thouch the grass

    Forget everything of the past
    My mind will be free to imagine
    Just once, let me rise from this earth
    let me place my feet on the wind and soar a little

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    Re: When I Close My Eyes

    It is a very good poem. It had alot of good emotions in it. Nice job and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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    Re: When I Close My Eyes

    Kyyyaa!!! The first verse of the second stanza really caught my attention! I think, I'd love to see you expound more, create more imager.
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    Re: When I Close My Eyes

    wow! nice poem star girl. I like the first stanza because it got my attention the most.

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    Re: When I Close My Eyes

    Your poem is great just needs to bring the imagery out more! No the less the emotion is there! Keep up the good work!

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