this is wht i call the prove to someone that im not an impaster this is ma own poem

bloody rain · Jul 07, 2008, 10:33 AM

my hands are frozen
my mouth stopped talkin
my legs are broken
my heart stopped beating
my blood is an explousion
my mind stopped thinking
my hands stopped writing
i wish im in the ausion
no one around
no one behind
no ships no boats
only in my mind
not looking behind
always look forward hardly never look back
keep on faith hell never let you down
beat the hate
and hope youre glad
at the end of the way you wont be sad

*Peach_follows* · Jul 07, 2008, 02:18 PM

You don't have to prove anything to me.... I have no doubt in my mind that you wrote this. For what its worth... its not bad. I like ut.
However, there are errors (which would be expected if English isn't your first languege). If typing in microsoft word is your secret to editing, perhaps you should continue to use that.
Honestly, I use word document programs to edit my work before I post it as well.

bloody rain · Jul 07, 2008, 03:06 PM

thnx alot for replying and i really dont have alot time to write on the word be4 puting sth in here
specially when im gana travel at the end of the next week wish me luck
and theres not net in that country exept in rare places and too expinsive
and yeah im oreginally arabian but ive no matter with understanding language but its hard to write the exact spelling or to stick to gramer
i know for sure that ive got lots of mistakes but umm im hoping to be an english professor in future
but im only 15 and in our countries not so many ppl can master this language specially in my age so i hope you understand how my hard working to learn and taste the sweetness of english cuz i consider it my main language after arabic and japanese ofcourse
yeah i know im talkin too much
but im sooooooooooo happy to see your posting sis thnx alot
sionara

Jul 07, 2008, 10:33 AM	#1 (permalink)
bloody rain Newbie Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: in the cruel world called reality Posts: 36 Thanks: 21 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Credits: 1,470	this is wht i call the prove to someone that im not an impaster this is ma own poem my hands are frozen my mouth stopped talkin my legs are broken my heart stopped beating my blood is an explousion my mind stopped thinking my hands stopped writing i wish im in the ausion no one around no one behind no ships no boats only in my mind not looking behind always look forward hardly never look back keep on faith hell never let you down beat the hate and hope youre glad at the end of the way you wont be sad __________________ keep smilling it makes ppl wonder wht ur up to black 4 darkness red 4 blood and loves for losers
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Jul 07, 2008, 02:18 PM	#2 (permalink)
Peach_follows Femmebot's feel nothing. Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 1,037 Thanks: 42 Thanked 33 Times in 31 Posts Credits: 2,978	Re: this is wht i call the prove to someone that im not an impaster this is ma own po You don't have to prove anything to me.... I have no doubt in my mind that you wrote this. For what its worth... its not bad. I like ut. However, there are errors (which would be expected if English isn't your first languege). If typing in microsoft word is your secret to editing, perhaps you should continue to use that. Honestly, I use word document programs to edit my work before I post it as well. __________________ Who needs a spray can, when you're a femmebot? http://www.myspace.com/j1gg481tt
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Jul 07, 2008, 03:06 PM	#3 (permalink)
bloody rain Newbie Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: in the cruel world called reality Posts: 36 Thanks: 21 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Credits: 1,470	Re: this is wht i call the prove to someone that im not an impaster this is ma own po thnx alot for replying and i really dont have alot time to write on the word be4 puting sth in here specially when im gana travel at the end of the next week wish me luck and theres not net in that country exept in rare places and too expinsive and yeah im oreginally arabian but ive no matter with understanding language but its hard to write the exact spelling or to stick to gramer i know for sure that ive got lots of mistakes but umm im hoping to be an english professor in future but im only 15 and in our countries not so many ppl can master this language specially in my age so i hope you understand how my hard working to learn and taste the sweetness of english cuz i consider it my main language after arabic and japanese ofcourse yeah i know im talkin too much but im sooooooooooo happy to see your posting sis thnx alot sionara __________________ keep smilling it makes ppl wonder wht ur up to black 4 darkness red 4 blood and loves for losers
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