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    Why?

    okay this is my first peom that i just really wanted to get all these feelings out.so please be as kind as possible. >.<i know it's it short but words can't tell u what i'm feeling but if u have a problem with what i wrote please pm me.

    Why?

    Why are they looking at me?
    With eyes filled with hate,

    Why do they look at me and think the same thing?
    That i just like the rest of them,

    Why do they not say anything to me?
    I look just like them,

    Why does this keep all away?
    I want to be near,

    Why do they push me away into the same class as them?
    I am different from them,

    Why does a small thing tear people apart?
    I always feel torn,

    Why do i feel this?
    because i was born into a world different
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    I will fight until i find what i'm looking for...you can not judge me on my apperence I am a Warrior. If you have a problem with me..... then my blades will meet your neck.

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    Re: Why?

    I kinda like it.
    Its like a story about a girl being judge because she's being herself.
    Sad feelings too.I thought about a girl being judge cuz she wants to be herself but everyone ignores her,she's like everyone else but people dont relize that.

    Yay,my first sig from meh,Kitten chan :3

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    Re: Why?

    i like the effects tht u did with the repested use of y coz it emphases on you craving to know y they r doing this to u.

    it's short n sweet poem which i like, MFG. This first poem u made is good

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Why?

    WOW!!

    Thats very very [no word]

    You must have it hard!

    I really like it, and made me think.
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    Re: Why?

    this poem is great , i mean you described it wonderfully
    this poem is built on a person's feelings
    if this is your first poem , i have to say
    it is great
    and if you need anything please , pm me ok
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    Re: Why?

    i loved this poem it really point out
    the ignorance in some people
    and the hatred the world has for certain
    races this ia a great poem cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Great Poem, it's really good. sound s like it should be
    a song

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    Re: Why?

    Very nicely done i must say ^^
    The message is shown clearly to the readers and has a very strong ending
    Nice poem.

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