Why do you hate me so much?
I've never done anything to you
You simply hate me because of the color of my skin
I never understood why that is
I'm still human
I breathe in and out just like you do
I have thoughts and desires
Treasures and dreams
What makes me so inferior to you?
I could understand if I had done something to you in the past
But I've just met you
How could you hate me so much to call me that name
And to spit in my face
Even though you hate me
I would never think of hurting you
If you needed help I would happily give it
If that meant giving my life I would
I truly believe you're a good person
I see the way you react to your children
You're so sweet and kind
Why cant you be that way to me?
Tears and panic filled you when you saw your own son walked away
I brought him back and you couldn't even stand to thank me
Everyone has someone precious to them
Please don't carry hate in your heart
Or it will end up killing you
And your precious ones
Will be left alone
Without a mother
And no one
Should suffer that kind of loss
Nice poem!!! It seem sad as well but it was just awesome since well some parts to me seem so romantic. I hope to see more!!! :D:
very deep material here! what you're saying is good, but when the poem sounds like thought (that's what i got from you're poem, that you were thinking) i think it would help if it if sounded like a string of words to show that...
also, you could show how your confusion grows by the shape of your poem. see, your stanzas differ in the amount of lines, which isn't bad, but gives it a lack of form...
maybe you could try to gradually give your stanzas more lines, but keep it constant...
you see? by keeping it consistent, it shows more consistency and depth of your thought since it's not going all over the place!
^o^ i hope this helps! keep making the good stuff!