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    Why am I so
    Attacked to boy's witch I won’t have
    Because when you talk to me that’s fine but when you see me in person
    Well I don’t want to go there
    But you should ask them what happened between us
    You may ask any of the many who have broken my heart
    Now I’m trying to forget
    And now it’s hard for me to love
    But know I have found a boy who loves me for me yet
    We ant together but he treats me like we are
    But maybe it might happen and it might not
    But well will soon see if it happens

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    Re: why am i...

    Sorry Liz, but you have worse spelling than me =P

    I like the meaning, kinda sad though..

    Hope you love for -ahem- lasts! hehe

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Spelling mistakes ^^; Nice poem but sad meaning.. interesting ^_^ keep it up

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    full of heart and love, its like a person is missing something, nice keep it up

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    Re: why am i...

    ok, im going to bash the crap out of this just because im sick of sugar coating my answers

    firstly, youre spelling is atrocious, and you completely put things in the wrong spot, like you put" attacked to boys" when it shouldve been "attracted to boys". there are many other spots where this is a problem, but theres no need to point them out

    secondly, your form is all off. you have very long sentences followed by very short sentences.


    this is not really a poem as much as it is rambling; its barely ledgible. just because youve written it down doesnt mean its a poem.

    (edit:this is constructive critisicm for anybody that wants to send me hate mail. you should only be mad at yourself for not pointing out the mistakes to help this person out)

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    wow finley some one didnt just right a bunch of BS

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    ok then shu that means from u any way i should just stop trying
    well if thats what you think i hope ur happy cos im not goin to do it again ok
    TT__TT

    but thank you all
    for the comments ^__^

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    no shu im not goin to get bullyed round my own thread and most deffently not u so i will keep goin and no one i mean no one will tell me my feeling are suger coted
    would u rather read about the pain and blood of a break up i dont think so

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