hmmm... This was a bit a rocky as far as the flow. And there were confusing parts... But I gotta say, I think this was one of your better works! I think you do well writing your honest feeling and thoughts. Like those first 2 stanzas... they were both clever, they set the scene for your story. They made me want to read more. It sounded more like YOUR WORDS, instead of a dolled up, romance novel. You should write like this more often.