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    Why do you care?!

    Why do you care?
    I don't speak to you.
    When I do, it's only drama
    and fights. *ding* Round 2!

    Why should I listen?
    You never hear me out!
    It's always about what you
    want, I can never open my mouth!

    Why should I care
    about what you have to say?
    When you won't listen to what
    I have to say on any given day.

    If you can't trust me,
    then you need to stay out of my biz.
    I'm still upset that you limited
    how much I see my kid!!

    Why do you care?
    Last time I checked, you hate me.
    So, why can't you just knock it
    off, why can't you just let me be?

    Why do you care???


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    Re: Why do you care?!

    awwwwww that is such a powerful poem. The subject of argument between two separate people and trying to fight for one to be heard and listened to. The never ending tug of war.

    It was yet another great poem written by you. I liked how the second and fourth line of every stanza rhymed it was what was needed to give it that extra kick rather than having it all rhyme.

    I really liked
    Why should I care
    about what you have to say?
    When you won't listen to what
    I have to say on any given day.
    It really worked well as the high point in the poem when it felt like the times were changing and you lost interest in trying to make the other person understand how you felt about them not listening to you.

    Great work as always Atmoik
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    Re: Why do you care?!

    Quote Originally Posted by Sazzy View Post
    awwwwww that is such a powerful poem. The subject of argument between two separate people and trying to fight for one to be heard and listened to. The never ending tug of war.

    It was yet another great poem written by you. I liked how the second and fourth line of every stanza rhymed it was what was needed to give it that extra kick rather than having it all rhyme.

    I really liked

    It really worked well as the high point in the poem when it felt like the times were changing and you lost interest in trying to make the other person understand how you felt about them not listening to you.

    Great work as always Atmoik
    I agree! that one is the stanza in the very center as well so it works perfectly. This poem has such great meaning to it, I dont know what this is (anger?) but it is quite strong. great job Sprout keep up the good work. I hope to see more from you soon. Nice rhiming too.
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    Re: Why do you care?!

    Thanks you guys! I'm glad you like my work! This poem is supposed to be more confused than it is angry--if that makes any sense. You ever have that one person in your life that you don't talk to... at all, and they persistantly keep prying in to affairs that don't concern them? That's what this is all about. Wondering about why someone would care so much about YOUR personal busuness, when you don't speak to them, you don't want to and don't like the idea of sharing your biz with them.

    Once again, thanks and I hope you like my future work as well! (I also hope that this is considered a moderately high quality post, LOL.)


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    Re: Why do you care?!

    I would be lying if i said i hated it.
    I would hurt you if i said i loved it.

    I actually liked this poem. Full of emotion and powerful words. You have a good use of your vocab. I plan to see more from you and can you write a poem about a white slave child? I am doing this project for a publishing company and i want your work to be featured in it. I dont ask people but i like yours. Of course credit goes to you and evrything. If you pull it off or want to do it, can i have permission to use it

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