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    Why I left you

    Why I left you:

    You said you loved me, but you lied,
    You said you wanted to be with me,
    But you hardly tried,
    You said you hated him, but you lied,
    You said you didn’t want to be with him,
    Yet you lied,
    I said I wanted to leave you,
    But I didn't lie.


    My first poem.
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    Re: Why I left you

    I can feel the pain form this poem! Keep up the nice work and life can be cruel when it comes to love!

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    Re: Why I left you

    Lies are bad, and can be painful... I like this poem. It's not bad for your first. From here on out all you can do is get better the more you write. I look foward to reading more of your works.

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: Why I left you

    Not bad for your first poem. It was very good. I can't wait to read your next one.
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    Thanks so much I love it!

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